I wanted to let you know that I really enjoyed the amount of character you were able to give Jacob, and the hints at world building.
It does a good job of setting the scene and drawing you into the action.
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Re: Men at War
Thank you so much to take the time to register just to leave this comment. It means a lot, especially on a forum this young with few active users. I contemplated the idea to write a prequel to this that shows the beginnings of the Men at War group. But I wasn't sure whether I'd be able to pull that off. But the world building is something I think I would enjoy to get deeper into.Nightlight10 wrote: Wed Apr 23, 2025 5:35 pm I wanted to let you know that I really enjoyed the amount of character you were able to give Jacob, and the hints at world building.
It does a good job of setting the scene and drawing you into the action.
Was this the first time you read the story or did you by any chance read it on RavishU already?
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I stumbled across it on RavishU, but hadn't found the time to give it a proper read.Claire wrote: Wed Apr 23, 2025 6:15 pmThank you so much to take the time to register just to leave this comment. It means a lot, especially on a forum this young with few active users. I contemplated the idea to write a prequel to this that shows the beginnings of the Men at War group. But I wasn't sure whether I'd be able to pull that off. But the world building is something I think I would enjoy to get deeper into.Nightlight10 wrote: Wed Apr 23, 2025 5:35 pm I wanted to let you know that I really enjoyed the amount of character you were able to give Jacob, and the hints at world building.
It does a good job of setting the scene and drawing you into the action.
Was this the first time you read the story or did you by any chance read it on RavishU already?
I think a prequel could be fascinating. The logistics of how they are pulling these attacks off, who and how they gathered as well as the initial stumbles would be fun to see explored.