Uber

[LtBroccoli]

Teaser: The Uber Driver takes advantage of a situation...
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The following story is a work of fiction meant for entertainment purposes only. It depicts nonconsensual sexual acts between adults. It is in no way meant to be understood as an endorsement of nonconsensual sex in real life. Any similarities of the characters in the story to real people are purely coincidental.
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Title: Uber
Author: Lt. Broccoli
Chapter Tags: MF, drugs, ncon, sleep
Content Warnings: Multiple scenes of sexual assault
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Uber



Author’s Note:  This was written in a screenplay template in Word, and I’m still transferring over older works. This was originally written for RavishU in August, 2020, then later for The Black Van. Any edits are solely to make it look good on this site.

This story contains scenes of nonconsensual sex, drug use, and trespassing. Viewer discretion is advised.


“UBER”

By

Lt. Broccoli

STARRING
Michael Rowe as "The Driver"
Kira Kosarin as "Kira"
Peyton List (Peyton Roi List, the one from Cobra Kai) as "Peyton"
Jade Pettyjohn as "Jade"
Tim Blake Nelson as "Jack"

FADE IN:

INT. MINIVAN - NIGHT

A haggard looking man in his late 30’s sits in the driver’s seat of a minivan. His eyes scan the road, paying attention for other drivers all while looking for his destination. JIMMY DEE’S BAR.

The DRIVER activates his turn signal and pulls over. He grabs his phone from the holder and presses an “ARRIVED” button. A moment later he sends a text.

DRIVER (TEXT)
This is Jimmy from Uber. I’m outside in the tan minivan.

KIRA (TEXT)
OMW.

A beat.

The Driver looks at the clock. 1:31 AM. A group of young men leave the bar, yelling at each other playfully. A man and a woman leave arm in arm and sloppily make out up against a telephone pole.

Three young women stagger out of the bar, holding onto each other. The two on the outside are holding up, nearly dragging the one in the middle. They approach the van. The woman on the end knocks on the window. The Driver lowers it.

KIRA
You Jimmy?

DRIVER
Yeah, that’s me. Hop in and buckle up.

The Driver opens the side door. The two women on the ends helped the one in the middle into the back row and buckles her in. The other two sit in the Captain’s Chairs in the middle row. Once they are inside the Driver closes the side door.

The women are dressed for the club.

A woman with blonde hair, light skin, and above average height sits behind the driver. She wears a light, tight dress that ends mid-thigh and a pair of 3” heels that matches her dress. Her makeup is well done, but starting to show wear from being in a hot club all night.

The other woman up front is even taller, with long dark hair that falls to her ample breasts. She wore a simple little black dress with spaghetti straps that stopped mid-thigh as well. Her 4” heels make her appear like a giant when she stood outside.

The woman in the back is shorter, but still well dressed and just as gorgeous as the other two. She is already passed out on the back seat.

DRIVER
Where to?

The two women look at each other, steadying themselves as they sit. The brunette speaks up.

KIRA
1345 Locust Grove Drive. Out by the hills.

The Driver types the address into his phone, then starts the route.

GPS
Starting route...

The Driver looks at the ETA on the screen. Then he looks back at the women in his van. He places the phone back in its holder, then pulls out into traffic.

BLONDE
Hey, can you turn some music on? Like, some dance stuff?

DRIVER
Sure

The Driver turns on the stereo, playing some dance music. He keeps his eyes on the road until he is a couple blocks from the bar.

The girls up front talk to each other, trying to talk over the music. They look amazing.

DRIVER
Listen, it’s gonna be a while to get there, about an hour with traffic. You want some water?

BLONDE
Sure.

The Driver slides back the center console, exposing 8 bottles of water. 6 have no special markings. Two of them have “Curtesy of Uber” stickers on the caps. He grabs the two with the stickers and hands them to the women. Kira grabs the bottles. She gives one to her friend and keeps the other.

DRIVER
By the way, I’m Jimmy.

KIRA
I’m Kira, that’s Peyton, and our friend back there is Jade.

DRIVER
Nice to meet y’all. Any special reason for coming out tonight, or just wanna dance?

PEYTON
Jade just flew into town and we haven’t seen her in like FOR EVER.

DRIVER
Cool, y’all go to school or something.

KIRA
Something.

The radio played a different song

KIRA
Ohh, that’s my shit right there, turn it up!

The Driver turns up the volume. He sees both women open the bottles and starts drinking. He smiles.

[FLASHBACK TO:

INT. DRIVER’S APARTMENT – DAY

The Driver sits at a table, several water bottles sit off to the side. Music played from a phone sitting on the table. The driver grabs a bottle of water from the pack and holds it upside down on the table. He picks up a small power drill and carefully drills a tiny hole in the bottom center, where the plastic is mold injected. After making and clearing the hole, he puts down the drill and grabs a syringe full of clear liquid and squirted it into the hole. The Driver then carefully cleans the area with a towel, then uses a hot glue gun to seal it up. After making sure that it didn’t leak, he turns the bottle right-side up and puts a “Curtesy of Uber” sticker on the cap.

INT. MINIVAN – NIGHT

The music is still bumping in the van, but the women aren’t. They pass out in their seats, bottles of water nearly emptied. Peyton’s head falls onto her shoulders while Kira’s head leans back against the headrest.

The Driver pauses the directions on the phone and turns down a side road.

EXT. SIDE ROAD - NIGHT

The minivan drives down a bumpy side road.

EXT. ABANDONED QUARRY - NIGHT

The Driver pulls in to an abandoned quarry. He drives to a secluded spot and parks the van, then turns off the engine.

The Driver exits the van and walks to the rear, opening the tailgate. He grabs a blanket and a small bookbag. He spreads out the blanket by the passenger side door.

He opens the door and takes a long, hard look at Kira. She looks amazing. Her skin is tanned, her tits are firm, and legs are muscular.

The Driver checks her breathing. She is alive. He shakes her head gently to wake her. No response. He reaches over her and unbuckles her seatbelt. No response. He grabs her left tit and squeezed. No response, and no bra. The Driver takes off her heels.

The Driver pulls Kira out of the van with some effort, sitting her on the floor of the van before laying her down on the blanket. Her skirt bunches up around her waist, exposing a tiny black thong. He reaches under Kira’s butt, grabs the panty waistline, and pulls them up and off her legs. He places them in her heels, so he wouldn’t forget them.

The Driver opens his bag grabs a bottle of KY Jelly. He spreads Kira’s legs open and rubs a generous amount of jelly on her bare pussy and inside of her vulva.

The Driver unfastens his jeans and kneels between Kira’s legs. He pushes his jeans and underwear down in one motion. He inches closer to her as his erection jumps from his pants.

The Driver spreads Kira’s pussy lips open with his left hand while holding his cock with his right. He pushes, his cockhead passing into her tight love canal. He holds still for a moment, savoring the feeling of being inside her, before he pumps in and out of her.

As he fucks Kira, the Driver pulls the spaghetti straps of her dress down, exposing her tits. They are at least a 36C, maybe D. He grabs them, kneads them, pinches them, licks them, and bites them, but not hard enough to leave a mark.

After a few minutes, the Driver’s thrusts increase in speed and his breath quickens. He is close. After a moment, he plants his seed deep into Kira’s womb as he cums.

The Driver collapses, lying on top of her for a moment before pulling out. He reaches into his bag and grabs a few wet wipes and cleans up the both of them, paying special attention to her cunt and the cum leaking out of it. Once done, he dresses her, fixing her dress and putting her panties back on.

He struggles for a moment to get her back in her seat, but once she is in, he buckles her up and closes her door.

The Driver throws the dirty wipes in a plastic shopping bag he keeps in his bookbag. He then drags everything over to his side of the van, spreading the blanket out yet again.

He opens the sliding door and sees Peyton sprawled and slumped over. He checks to make sure she is still alive and how she reacts by caressing her face then grabbing her tit through her dress. She isn’t wearing a bra, either.

The Driver unbuckles her seatbelt and pulls her out of the van. She lands half in, half out with her stomach on the floor and her lower half hanging out of the van.

He admires the view for a moment before pulling Peyton’s dress up over her hips. She isn’t wearing any panties. His dick gets hard looking at her tight little ass and perfectly trimmed pussy.

The Driver grabs the KY Jelly again, this time applying it to Peyton’s pussy, as well as a generous coating on his own dick.

He kneels down behind her, bent over in the van’s doorway, and slides his dick into her quim with some resistance. After a minute he built up a rhythm and fucks Peyton as he grabs her hips.

The Driver didn’t last long. After a couple minutes at most, he picked up the pace and thrust into the blonde hard as he cums. Sweat dripped down his forehead as he pulls his cum-covered dick out of Peyton. He caught his breath for a moment before cleaning her up, dressing her, and putting her back in her seat, buckled up.

The Driver grabs two clean bottles of water from the center console. He marks the drugged water levels with his finger, then emptied the fresh bottles to those points. He dumps out the tainted waters and puts the empty bottles and unmarked caps in the trash. He places the marked caps on the clean bottles and puts them back with the girls.

He puts his bookbag and blanket in the trunk of the minivan, then climbs back in the driver’s seat. He starts the car and buckles up. He looks back at this handiwork.

Kira is back in the same position she passed out in, but is starting to move a little. Peyton is still zonked out and is now snoring. The young woman in the back seat, Jade, is still sleeping.

The Driver turns on the GPS and the music down.

GPS
Recalculating Route.

EXT. ABANDONED QUARRY – NIGHT

The minivan shifted into gear and drives off.

MONTAGE
- The minivan drives through the country. Music plays through the stereo.
- The Driver sees the women slowly wake up.
- The minivan drives into the suburbs, stopping at stoplights.
- Jade sleeps in the back seat.
- The minivan heads to a nice suburban neighborhood.
- Peyton starts rolling her head.
- The minivan pulls up to a house with the numbers “1345” illuminated. The vehicle stops.

INT. MINIVAN – NIGHT

The Driver looks in the mirror as he drives. Kira starts to wake and move in her seat.

DRIVER
Hey. HEY!

Kira moves a little more. She’s still groggy and under the influence of the alcohol and the date rape drug.

KIRA
(Slurring)
What? Where are we?

DRIVER
We’re here. 1345 Locust Grove Road. Time to get out.

Kira couldn’t focus on the Driver. She tried to sit up, but nearly falls over.

DRIVER
You gonna be okay getting to the door? You’re not looking so good. I’ll help you to the door.

The Driver turns off the engine and exits the car.

EXT. 1345 LOCUST GROVE ROAD - NIGHT

He opens Kira’s door, helping her unbuckle her seatbelt, and grabs her shoes and purses. He helps her exit the minivan and walks her to the front door.

As they approach the front door, the porch light turns on. A man with thinning grey hair wearing a bathrobe opens the door.

MAN
Who are you?

The Driver stopped a few feet from the door, Kira slumped on his shoulder.

DRIVER
I’m Jimmy from Uber. Kira and Peyton gave me this address.

MAN
You’ve got Peyton with you, too? I’m Kira’s dad, Jack.

KIRA
Hey!

Kira yells from the Driver’s shoulder.

DRIVER
Sir, could you give me a hand? She’s not as light as she looks, and she’s the best off of the three.

The Driver walks Kira over to Jack, who falls into his arms.

JACK
You said three of them?

DRIVER
Yeah, Jade’s in the back seat. I just hope she didn’t make a mess. I’ll get the next girl. You got Kira?

JACK
Uh huh.

Jack leads the way, nearly dragging Kira into his house, dropping her on the couch.

The Driver returns to the van and tries to wake up Peyton. She is out of it. He unbuckles her from the seat and hoists her up onto his shoulder in a fireman’s carry. It takes some serious effort not to drop her, but he gets Peyton to the porch.

Jack directs him to the couch, where he drops her next to Kira. The Driver goes onto the porch to catch his breath.

JACK
Who’s left?

The Driver is bent over as he spoke.

DRIVER
Jade. She’s the smallest, but is the most drunk and in the back seat.

JACK
Give me a moment.

Jack stepped inside out of sight for a moment, then returns, wearing a pair of tennis shoes.

JACK
Let’s go.

The Driver and Jack walk to the van.

INT. MINIVAN - NIGHT

Jack and the Driver climb into the back of the van where Jade sleeps. The Driver shakes Jade a couple times. She doesn’t budge. He unbuckles her seatbelt. Jack grabs her arms as the Driver grabs her legs. They pick her up and maneuvered her out of the van.

EXT. 1345 LOCUST GROVE RD – NIGHT

The two men carry Jade to the porch. They stop. Jack huffs and puffs, out of breath.

JACK
Just, just give me a sec.

INT. 1345 LOCUST GROVE RD LIVING ROOM – NIGHT

The nicely furnished living room has a large couch along the back wall facing the window and a love seat against the back wall. A table sits in the middle of the room. End tables with lamps flank the couch and the love seat.

Kira and Peyton are crashed out on the couch. Kira moves every so often, but Peyton is out.

The two men enter and carry Jade to the love seat. Jack lost his footing and lands on it, taking Jade with him. She falls on top of him, her dress riding up her legs and over her hips. Jack sits there for a moment, admiring the view before the Driver spoke.

DRIVER
I’ll be back in a sec, wanna make sure I got everything before I leave.

Jack nods. The Driver left the living room.

A beat.

The Driver returns, carrying a pair of shoes and a purse. He talks as he comes back in.

DRIVER
I found some of their stuff, don’t see anything else so I’m...

The Driver stops in his tracks as he sees Jack, rubbing Jade’s pussy with his right hand and groping her tits with his left. Her head has flopped onto his shoulder.

JACK
You’ve been very helpful tonight and deserve a tip. You see that wallet on the end table next to the door?

The Driver turns and sees it.

JACK
Yeah, that one. How about you reach in and grab some cash out of there.

The Driver picked up the wallet.

DRIVER
How much?

JACK
How much is in there?

The Driver counted the money.

DRIVER
About $300.

JACK
Take it, it’s yours. You earned it.

DRIVER
Thanks.

The Driver walks to the door.

JACK
You didn’t see anything did you?

Jack is busy finger banging Jade as he pulls her dress down enough to expose her tits.

DRIVER
See what?

JACK
Exactly. Have a good night. Close the door on your way out.

DRIVER
You too.

The Driver leaves the house with a huge smirk on his face, knowing that he fucked both Peyton and Kira, Jack’s daughter. Jack smiles as he pushes Jade’s head down to his crotch as the Driver closes the door behind him.

FADE OUT.

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[Neighbor]

I enjoyed the turn of events.
The dialog and narration was sparse, but was adequate to convey the story, and deliver the twist.
I was struck that the driver didn't "do" the original unconscious girl.
But it was fun to see that Kira's dad was going to take care of that.
And once that I saw that Kira's dad was going to "cover the tracks", if I were the driver, I'd have found a way to leave my uber card in each of the 3 girl's purses, suggesting in a handwritten note on the back, that If the girl "had any problem", "needed any help", to give me a call.

This is my first comment on this forum, I'll see if I can figure out the "reputation" mechanics - got it. 3 points awarded to reputation.

[Blue]

@LtBroccoli
I've read the story twice now. And unfortunately, even after that, I still can't get anything out of it.
Yes, the idea with Uber isn't bad in and of itself. But the writing style is – at least for me – very difficult to read and understand.
A lot of direct speech, simply strung together. With little or no action in between. It just doesn't read smoothly, and that's very important to me if a story is to get a positive review from me.
Sorry for the criticism, it's just not my taste.

[LaLia]

Unfortunately, I have to agree with Blue. To me, it almost reads like a note before writing a story. I'd be interested in the idea behind it! The storyline definitely had potential.

[LtBroccoli]

@LtBroccoli
I've read the story twice now. And unfortunately, even after that, I still can't get anything out of it.
Yes, the idea with Uber isn't bad in and of itself. But the writing style is – at least for me – very difficult to read and understand.
A lot of direct speech, simply strung together. With little or no action in between. It just doesn't read smoothly, and that's very important to me if a story is to get a positive review from me.
Sorry for the criticism, it's just not my taste.

This was written as a screenplay, which is a completely different method of storytelling than narrative paragraphs. It's meant to convey direct action and only what is observable, preferably as it is seen on screen. I've got a post over on the Book Club section breaking down how to read and write screenplays. I got my start in screenplays/visual writing and am much more comfortable with it than traditional narratives. Sure, I can do them, but I prefer this. It's my filmmaking background coming out.

You have the slug lines, which describe the scene. Interior or Exterior? Where and what time of day. The bold names are the characters and the text right underneath that is their dialog. Any special instructions are included in parentheses. The actions are split up to indicate what is a different camera shot. For example, if I were shooting this, I'd start with a close up shot of the Driver as he's driving, eyes darting around. Cut to a shot of his point of view of the road, flitting about looking for Jimmy Dee's bar. I'd focus on that for a moment before the next shot shows him turning on the turn signal and the wheel turning. As he parks the car, I'd cut to him holding his phone as he texts, showing what he says and Kira's reply. Next shot would be the clock on the dash, then action outside.

Hope that helps going forward. This was one of my first porn screenplays I wrote for RU back in the day. I've refined the style more over time. Web forums aren't the best method to show these type of stories, but they work.

[LtBroccoli]

Unfortunately, I have to agree with Blue. To me, it almost reads like a note before writing a story. I'd be interested in the idea behind it! The storyline definitely had potential.

It comes down to the difference between narrative and screenplay storytelling. Screenplays are much more "Show don't tell" since they're supposed to shot and displayed, whereas the novel can go into much more details. I like them both, but prefer screenplays. Get me in the write mood, and I can write 50-100 pages of screenplay in a night. I've got a primer over on the Book Club section that can help answer any questions.

[LtBroccoli]

I enjoyed the turn of events.
The dialog and narration was sparse, but was adequate to convey the story, and deliver the twist.
I was struck that the driver didn't "do" the original unconscious girl.
But it was fun to see that Kira's dad was going to take care of that.
And once that I saw that Kira's dad was going to "cover the tracks", if I were the driver, I'd have found a way to leave my uber card in each of the 3 girl's purses, suggesting in a handwritten note on the back, that If the girl "had any problem", "needed any help", to give me a call.

This is my first comment on this forum, I'll see if I can figure out the "reputation" mechanics - got it. 3 points awarded to reputation.

Thanks Neighbor. When I originally wrote this, I seriously contemplated having the Driver go after Jade, but I felt that would be too monotonous and he'd just nutted twice. But since this is a screenplay/play, I remembered Chekov's Gun. "If you introduce a gun in Act 1, you must use it in Act 2." This is porn, and I introduced Jade. She needs to be used in Act 2, and the dad was the perfect way out.

Also, welcome aboard. I'm still figuring things out as well, but it's good to see you again following KB and RU going down.

[Neighbor]

Also, welcome aboard. I'm still figuring things out as well, but it's good to see you again following KB and RU going down.

And good to see YOU. (I had left the board where "TOES" was the admin, and went to RU in about 2010, at the invite of one of the guys who was also making that move. I was active in RU for about 5 yrs, being their librarian, after that first gal, that was their story librarian, passed in 2011. I deleted my collection of stories about 3 yrs ago, at RU, when it seemed the board was going to collapse.)