The Sarlacc Awakens

[praetor3d]

Teaser: A detailed account of a young pilot who crash lands on a remote desert planet. What vile danger lurks beneath the hot sand?
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The following story is a work of fiction meant for entertainment purposes only. It depicts nonconsensual sexual acts between adults. It is in no way meant to be understood as an endorsement of nonconsensual sex in real life. Any similarities of the characters in the story to real people are purely coincidental.
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Title: The Sarlacc Awakens
Author: Praetor3D

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My first story which is in comic form to test out image posting.

This work is from a request that led to a series of storyboards containing ideas and images.
The concept was never formally written, but I compiled the content into a quick flash story here.

For context, here is the main character sheet:



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[Shocker]

Interresting concept, are those pictures by you? Having the text combined with the pictures made it difficult to read on the phone, but worked of course well on a larger screen. The scenario itself is nightmare fuel, and the pictures do reinforce the feeling. This is just a personal preferrence, but I do like the text content to drastically outweigh graphics.

[Claire]

I really liked what you did with the formatting of this one. I first thought you used the float BBCode to have images and text show up next to each other but these are all images, right? I guess we will find out now how many people here are into tentacles.

One minor criticism: I found the animation with the Tie fighter exploding over and over again distracting while reading. Seeing a flashy explosion out of the corner of the eye repeatedly did not make for the best reading experience in my opinion. But I think especially that last animation where she is completely naked looks great! The horror that she will be kept alive like this for hundreds of years...

Btw, I've obviously seen Star Wars but I'm not super deep into the extended lore. Will Star Wars fans immediately recognize this story as Star Wars fanfiction from having Sarlacc in its title? I didn't. I wondered whether it would make sense to change the title to "The Sarlacc Awakens - A Star Wars FanFiction" or something like that.

[Blue]

The combination of images and text is unique in this form in the forum. Interesting idea.
But it also makes it difficult for me personally to read the story.
I usually use the Google Chrome browser to read here in the forum. With a simple right-click, the English stories are automatically and very well translated into German, so I can then read them without any problems.
Unfortunately, that doesn't work with this presentation format, so I have to read the story in English. Which isn't always easy for me. Therefore, my interest in this format is rather low, at least from my side.

[LaLia]

Nice idea...I like visual stories, comics, etc., and even though sci-fi isn't really my thing, I liked this story.

Oh, and @Claire. Two people spontaneously come to mind who are into tentacles.

I agree with Claire about the exploding spaceship. That was a bit too "flashy" and could put some people off reading altogether. I would have spontaneously said to put the explosion in slow motion and not on a continuous loop. And yes, the last image is definitely triggering and is superbly done.

I agree with Blue's criticism. Maybe next time, separate images and separate text?

Did you take the images/videos yourself? I also like to tinker with AI images and incorporate them into my stories, but this is in a whole different league.

[Nickamano]

Quite liked this as a short flash story. The imagery was well put together. Though sometimes the text was tricky to read.

I feel like more could have been made of the fact that the Sarlacc tends to keep its victims alive for a thousand years and the poor pilot would have been used as a foetal incubator for the entirety of that time is kinda as mind blowing as it is terrifying.
Maybe another page or two showing the passage of time while other 'prisoners/food' are introduced or removed, and the pilots interactions with them? Could be 'fun' to have other people in the same 'digestion chamber' and you're just idly chatting and gossiping with them for the thousand years... hang on I think I'm getting silly.

And BTW (Claire)- Star Wars fans will definitely spot a Star Wars story nothing more than with the word Sarlacc in the title.

[EvilKnight]

Interesting and well done. The violation seemed to get short shrift and I would have enjoyed a more detailed account of her rape