On Persuasion Street - Kristen's Board Contest

[Colin Piper]

Teaser: When you live on a typical suburban street and you've got the ability to Mind Control, well you've got to take advantage of your remarkable ability. Don't you?
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The following story is a work of fiction meant for entertainment purposes only. All sexual acts depicted in this story take place between consenting adults. Any similarities of the characters in the story to real people are purely coincidental.
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Title: On Persuasion Street
Author: Colin Piper

This story competes in the Kirstensboard Memorial Contest
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On Persuasion Street

I wait until 9pm. Then it's a quick stroll down the street to the Pham's. I ring the doorbell and the yappy little dog goes nuts. Lin comes to the door. I stare into her eyes. Mesmerize her.

"I'm here for Lily," I say.

Lin turns her head and shouts inside. "Lily, our neighbour mister Jack. He here faw you!"

Lily appears at the door. OMG she's fucking gorgeous! She's ready for bed and is wearing long cotton pajama bottoms and a white top with a thin strap. And no bra. The shape of those little titties and the contrast of the white cotton with her tanned Asian skin makes my cock thicken.

"What do you mean he's here for me?" she says.

Then I look into her beautiful dark eyes. "I've come to take you back to my place." I hold out my hand.

"Oh." She moves forward and I put my arm around her waist.

I turn back to Lin. "I'll bring her back in the morning."

"Okay Mister Jack."

The yappy dog is at her feet. Mind control doesn't work on the lower class of animal and the little fucker’s yaps have now turned into one long nasty growl. He knows exactly what's going on here.

I kiss Lily, right there on the doorstep in front of her mother. She tastes and smells delicious. I take her hand and lead her out the driveway. The door closes behind us.

As we approach my house I can't resist anymore and slip my hand down the back of her pants. Vietnamese girls are so petite and pretty. I feel a smooth little bum cheek, gently squeeze it. "I've got lots of massage oil and lube," I say. "We're going to have so much fun. All night and into the morning."

"Okay," Lily says, as we approach the door.

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She goes up the stairs first and I follow and caress the walnut handrail with long slim fingers, looking at the way her cute butt cheeks move with each step. I imagine her insides will feel just as deliciously smooth. A moan escapes my lips when I think of how hot it will be to inspect her little rosebud. Fuck.

“To the left at the top of the stairs,” I say.

A light breeze pushes the thin sheer curtains into the bedroom from the open balcony doors. I’ve prepared everything beforehand; candles glimmer, a sweet smell of sandalwood incense, ambient music on medium low.

I stand beside Lily and turn her around to face me. “Let’s have a look at you.”

I reach down to gently take the top off over her head. Lily complies and lifts her thin arms. I love how she has either shaved her underarms or has no hair there at all. I gasp at the sight of her pretty titties. I cup them and moan at the sensation of holding those beautiful soft puppies. The puffy nipples stiffen when I gently rub my palms around the areole. She sighs when I take the index finger and thumb of each hand and gently tug until the swollen nips are the length and feel of warm bullets.

I get on my knees and tug her pants and underwear down. There is a thin covering of dark hair on her pussy. I’ve prepared for this and lead her over to the bed and unfold a towel.

“Sit here on the edge of the bed, honey. Spread your legs a little.” Then, with the gentlest push I say, “Now lie on your back. That’s it. Just relax and look at the fan.”

I place a porcelain basin of warm water at the foot of the bed. It’s only necessary to clip a little of her pubic hair with the nail scissors. Then it’s the shaving foam and razor. I go to work: a gentle parting and stretch of the folds to make sure I don’t nick her; a lift of her legs to shave all the way down from her sweet pussy to the perineum; deft little twists of the wrist around the exquisite anus. In a couple of minutes she’s hairless from the neck down. I stand and take her hands and raise her up.

“Look at you. Beautiful. Who would believe you’re really eighteen?”

I smile as I unbutton my shirt, kick off the deck shoes, and pull my shorts and underwear down. My cock has thickened from the eroticism of the shaving and the sight and aroma of her petite naked body.

“I think you’re a virgin, Lily. Have you seen a man’s big cock before?”

“No.”

“Here, give me your hand. That’s it. Put your fingers around it. Yes, like that. Now rub it backwards and forwards. Use your other hand to hold my balls. Feel how heavy and swollen they are? That means I’m going to squirt a big load of hot sticky cum. Rub along the cock just a little more sweetie. Aah, there, good girl.”

“It’s very big.”

“That’s because you’re a super pretty girl, Lily. Men’s cocks get big and stiff for cute girls. Haven’t you had any boyfriends?”

The big almond eyes give her such a sweet innocent look as her fingers hold and stroke my throbbing cock. “No, my dad doesn’t want me to have Anglo boyfriends. He wants me to date nice Vietnamese boys. Sons of his friends. But I don’t want to.”

I chuckle. “Well, I wonder what he would think of this? Do you know what fucking is Lily?”

“You mean sex?”

“Yes, I do. But fucking sounds better. First, I’m going to taste you all over. Then maybe you can taste me. And then I’m going to fuck you. Put my cock inside you. It will be so much fun, Lily. Lie down on the bed again.”

I drop to the floor and spread her legs and plant little kisses, going from her knee to the top of her pussy. I lift her legs up and hold them there. The prize is presented to me – this time beautifully smooth. I press my face on her sweet little pussy and inhale. Then my tongue is out and Lily moans as I lap at her with long broad strokes of my tongue from top to bottom. I spread the lips with my fingers and they make a delicious wet sound. I consider licking her asshole but I decide not to, yet. I want to save that delicacy for the obsessive anal attention I will give her later.

Plus, she needs to know what a cock tastes like; she needs to learn how to take it down her throat. “Let’s turn you around,” I say. I stand and turn Lily on the bed so her head hangs over the edge of the mattress and her long dark hair touches the floor. “I’ve got you honey. You won’t fall.” Then I look down into her eyes to make sure she complies with what I’m about to say. “I’m going to put my cock in your mouth and push it down your throat. You need to relax so you can take it all inside.”

“Okay.”

I bend my knees and hold on to the back of her head with one hand while I guide my cock into her upside-down mouth with the other. “Just breathe through your nose, Lily. That’s it, you’re doing great.” She needs to be reassured and encouraged for what’s about to come next. Then I take the plunge.

“Gurrk!” Her body stiffens.

“That’s it sweetie, take my cock down your throat.” I begin to pump.

“Gurrk! Gurrk! Gurrk!”

“Ah fuck, that feels good.” I bend forward and tase her pussy again while I pump into her mouth.

“Urrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr!”

I feel Lily is about to vomit so I stop and ease my cock out, covered in her drool. Then I ease her around on the bed until she’s on her back with her feet at the bottom of the bed again. She lies there and puts her hand on her tummy and coughs and I hand her the towel.

“Well done, Lily. That was very good for your first time throat fucking. You didn’t even spew!”

I move forward with my wet cock leading the way and spread her legs. Her pussy is covered in my saliva. I press my swollen knob forward to the smooth clean wet pussy lips and rub it up and down. “Time to put my cock into you Lily. Okay?”

She nods, then stiffens as I press forward. “Ohhhhhhh!”

“Ssh, baby, hold on.” I stop. “Just take a deep breath, that’s it. And let it out.” As she exhales, I push forward again and bury my cock deep into her virgin pussy.

Lily moans and takes another breath and grips the bed covers with both hands.

I ease out a little, then another push forwards. She’s so tight and wet it’s fucking delicious. I’m overcome with ecstasy and lean forward to scoop her into my arms and stand up. Lily moans again as she slithers all the way down on my rock-hard pole, and this time I think it’s with real pleasure.

I lean back and look into her eyes. “What do you think of that my darling? Is it good?” She’s so close to my face she nods and kisses me. My arms are wrapped around her tight and I turn to the balcony doors. I walk over to them with the darling girl impaled on my cock. How good would it be if someone was out walking on the street and could see us in the candlelight, fucking like this?

And someone is walking on the street. And now they’re walking up my driveway, looking right up at us.

“It’s my dad,” Lily says.

It certainly is, because Tony Pham is now running up the driveway with a Face of Fucking Fury!

His fists hammer the door and I reluctantly lift his daughter off my throbbing cock. She just stands there and looks at my swollen purple head, all wet and pulsing with its own desire to get back up inside her. But it, and Lily, and I, will have to wait.

I quickly grab my shorts and pull them on and race down the stairs.

“Hold on Tony!” I shout. “I’m coming. Well, no I… Fuck, hold on. Don’t break the fucking door.”

I run to open the door before he breaks through it with an ax, Jack Nicholson-style, and it occurs to me as I reach for the handle that if the mind control fails me now, I’ll be the one who’s really fucked.

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[End]
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Feedback always appreciated.

[Shocker]

Lily would likely say to the idea of the narrator being really fucked „okay“.

You are doing a good job here showing here as the apathetic controlled victim, and I think that works well for a mind control story. MCStories.com was my first contact with erotic stories when I was much younger, so I always liked thar genre.

Strictly from a storytelling aspect it would not have hurt to get a bit more into his power. If your big turn is that his powers might fail him, showing a bit of strain when controlling others would have built up to that. You inly say he can’t control lower animals.

It’s a very well done story, but I think you have even more potential.

[SoftGameHunter]

So I guess the question regarding consent is, did he make her agree or convince her to agree? Either way, it's a good way to get nubile agreeable young women into bed, but certainly has the drawback that angry outsiders might come running over on a rampage. Agreed that if failure was a possibility, it would have been good to have that foreshadowed.

Interesting question: what's the dividing line for lower animals? If an enraged father is so mad he's just lashing out with animal anger, would that count? It would be quite the constraint for our protagonist - perfect control over the calm and rational, but none over the angered and furious.

[RapeU]

I'm not sure about mind control as a con story, but I'll leave that up to the community to decide. It's definitely a grey area. As for the story itself, this is one where I wish it wasn't constrained by word limits. There's potential for expansion and worldbuilding here.

Interesting question: what's the dividing line for lower animals? If an enraged father is so mad he's just lashing out with animal anger, would that count? It would be quite the constraint for our protagonist - perfect control over the calm and rational, but none over the angered and furious.

I think that was hinted at in the end, the father was so enraged his mind was more animal than human and if mind control failed the protagonist would be fucked.