My Dearest Mirror - Kristen's Board

[Claire]

@Vela Nanashi I was wondering whether you would like this one. Writing first person present-tense I consider Vela-bait. But I thought the story might feel too real for you. On the other hand, the story does have a happy end!

Sorry for so few words, I am swept up in his caresses and trying to explain to her how beautiful all of her is to him

So the shorter a Vela-comment is, the more you liked the story?

I like your little mundane sort of details like this:

(...)

It helps make the characters so much more real.

Thank you! It's nice to see someone notice small details like that.

And you did have me guessing throughout the story. I was sure the other partner was a woman!

And here I thought that the remembered dialogue line

“Uhh… I don’t know, I never noticed. Which one’s the bigger one…?”

would give it away.

[AdmiralPiet]

@Claire:
Difficult one to judge.
I would say: Very well written story, but I am not the right audience (?)

From the technical standpoint it is on the level I expect from you.
As others have mentioned: You think of small details to give it depht.
She also reminds me of someone close to me that also has times where the body dysmorphia kicks in and she really dislikes her appearance, despite being objectively a beautiful woman.
But then there are also times where she is like: "I am a sexy bitch, yeah!"
That really shows how you are able to build believable characters.

But for me, this was too much mind and feeling, instead of actual things happening.
Hard to describe.

[Claire]

But for me, this was too much mind and feeling, instead of actual things happening.
Hard to describe.

I think for me that's not even a distinction I'm making. Describing a feeling or a thought is as much something happening in a story to me as saying "character A went to place B and did thing C there". But I get that the story is not for everyone. Its erotic charge comes from emotional intimacy and the meaning of the actions, not from "this hits my favorite kink", "they are doing it in my favorite position" or "this character looks like my dream guy/girl".

But then there are also times where she is like: "I am a sexy bitch, yeah!"

Good for her!