Men at War

[Lara]

well done, well done - hope to read more of you

[Claire]

well done, well done - hope to read more of you

Thx!

[sinfulwords]

This was a funny one despite the very serious political overtones. The manosphere agenda represents widespread ideological extremism that fosters highly destructive social paradigms so, naturally, I enjoyed their politics being one: vilified, and two: ridiculed in this very intensely smutty story

I was amused by how cartoonishly accurate the Men At War characters were portrayed from the fact the rape (excuse me, the exorcism) was performed on a livestream, to the abundance of self-proclaimed male victimhood, all the way to the phrasing of the comments in aforementioned live stream: how u used all their sad little lingo like sigma and gigachad…the reason Jacob chose Elizabeth tho TOOOOOO REALISTIC!!! It’s just so frustrating there are actually people who would agree with that sentiment! Craziness! Pure craziness!

And despite how unfavorably I refer to their fuck-ass politics, the concept of the piece was hot to me nonetheless, cause although I am a proud feminist my kinks celebrated many things here, like all the degradation and objectification Elizabeth was forced to endure, the “men are superior, yadda-yadda-yadda” rhetoric, and the meaning Men At War assigned to all a woman’s holes….our kinks are so often not our politics (thank god), so I really enjoyed all that politically incorrect drivel

Jimmy was a choice character. A very animated host. I loved his synthetically proud “alpha” vibes regardless of how lewd and outlandish I find his views (but I kinda liked the depravity of it all too ngl )…I suppose he had a couple of saving graces. He stood up for Jacob when he was being flamed in the chat…and I guess he celebrates ethnic diversity.

When he called Jordan Peterson their prophet I literally disintegrated tho HYSTERICAL

I’d like to compliment u on this extended metaphor as well:

No, their thrusting was coordinated, trained, a well oiled machine, a seasoned orchestra led by this man Jimmy, a masterful conductor. She could feel them thrusting and withdrawing, stretching her bowels, parting the walls of her vagina, sliding over her tongue. A long symphony building to an inevitable crescendo. At exactly the same time, she felt all three of their cocks swell and come to a rest deep inside of her.

I even found it amusing when Elizabeth was successfully exorcised in the end, how after a two hour rape she actually seemed “Content with the affirmation that she was a good girl”…this felt like another political commentary to me so I do hope that was ur intention, because there are dudes out there who actually think all a rad-fem needs is a good fucking and then she’d magically abandon all her values. So, to me this part read like a caricature of that sentiment

Anyway this was thoroughly entertaining, I can see why it’s so popular. 10/10 and a gorillion kudos

[Claire]

@sinfulwords Thank you for another great comment. Let me give you a Vela-hug: Only complete with two surrounding purple hearts.

I enjoyed their politics being one: vilified, and two: ridiculed in this very intensely smutty story

Hehe, thanks! That was actually one of the things I challenged myself to do when I wrote this in late October/early November 2024 (third story ever): Can I combine rape fantasy with satire? Doesn't seem like the most natural genres to combine. I'm happy it worked for you!

I was amused by how cartoonishly accurate the Men At War characters were portrayed from the fact the rape (excuse me, the exorcism) was performed on a livestream, to the abundance of self-proclaimed male victimhood, all the way to the phrasing of the comments in aforementioned live stream: how u used all their sad little lingo like sigma and gigachad…the reason Jacob chose Elizabeth tho TOOOOOO REALISTIC!!! It’s just so frustrating there are actually people who would agree with that sentiment! Craziness! Pure craziness!

I'm honestly a little scared that at some point someone belonging to the group I'm making fun of reads this and just takes it dead serious, like: "Yes! That girl gets it!" But in the end, I have only so much control over how a story I write is received. I'd like to think that I did everything I could to make clear that I'm not endorsing but ridiculing this kind of thinking, but there is always a chance that the wrong people might get a kick out of it.

our kinks are so often not our politics (thank god), so I really enjoyed all that politically incorrect drivel

I had just fun taking that absurd line of thinking to its logical end point. When the story reached the point when Jacob cries about women not liking his sperm and the scene turns into a tender, naked group hug I was crying tears while writing. I love the sheer absurdity of that moment.

I suppose he had a couple of saving graces. He stood up for Jacob when he was being flamed in the chat…and I guess he celebrates ethnic diversity.

The one joke that the story tells over and over essentially is: men that would be able to be this vulnerable with each other and support each other like these guys do, would never do something like that to a woman. And Jimmy defending Jacob against chat is part of that paradoxical dynamic. I believe what he says there is true. Men do turn on each other too quickly when somebody doesn't live up to the standards they measure themselves by. The scene becomes funny for me because it feels so out of place in light of what they are doing to Elisabeth, but not if you look at it in isolation.

When he called Jordan Peterson their prophet I literally disintegrated tho HYSTERICAL

Let me reassemble you. I think Peterson is just the perfect figure for a cult like this.

I even found it amusing when Elizabeth was successfully exorcised in the end, how after a two hour rape she actually seemed “Content with the affirmation that she was a good girl”…this felt like another political commentary to me so I do hope that was ur intention, because there are dudes out there who actually think all a rad-fem needs is a good fucking and then she’d magically abandon all her values. So, to me this part read like a caricature of that sentiment

So my intention here was this: Elisabeth is just mentally checked out of the experience. They didn't convert her, they broke her. And in that broken state, she'd basically agree to anything and even absorb the pseudo tenderness that Jimmy shows her during that final exchange. To me, the "conversion" is meant to communicate that Elisabeth is just gone, at least in that moment. And the Men at War guys of course interpret breaking someone as convincing them.


Thanks again. It was nice to read a comment that actually engaged a bit with ideology that's being mocked here.

[sinfulwords]

Oh my god hugs

Can I combine rape fantasy with satire? Doesn't seem like the most natural genres to combine. I'm happy it worked for you!

You combined them flawlessly! Like cereal and milk fr fr

I'm honestly a little scared that at some point someone belonging to the group I'm making fun of reads this and just takes it dead serious, like: "Yes! That girl gets it!"

WELP! I wish I could ease your fear and tell you, “there’s absolutely no way some red-pilled d-bag could ever miss the comedic connotations in your story!”…..but they’re kinda, like, stupid, so I’m fairly certain they would read it and ONLY take it seriously…one bit of solace I can offer tho: many of them don’t actually read so I think you’re decently safe

When the story reached the point when Jacob cries about women not liking his sperm and the scene turns into a tender, naked group hug I was crying tears while writing. I love the sheer absurdity of that moment.

DUDE lol Jacob’s blubber-fest was genuinely sooooo funny the absurdity was ON POINT lmaooo

The one joke that the story tells over and over essentially is: men that would be able to be this vulnerable with each other and support each other like these guys do, would never do something like that to a woman. And Jimmy defending Jacob against chat is part of that paradoxical dynamic. I believe what he says there is true. Men do turn on each other too quickly when somebody doesn't live up to the standards they measure themselves by. The scene becomes funny for me because it feels so out of place in light of what they are doing to Elisabeth, but not if you look at it in isolation.

Hmmm that’s actually very profound good ole, Claire, lol putting deep meaning even into a satirical rape story but sincerely, I agree, men are brutal to each other. the toxic standards they hold each other to have directly contributed to the alienation they feel in today’s society…they’re just obtuse and spiteful so they blame women and the lack of traditional values for the feeling of said alienation bunch of silly ass geese 🪿

To me, the "conversion" is meant to communicate that Elisabeth is just gone, at least in that moment. And the Men at War guys of course interpret breaking someone as convincing them.

Myes Myes I see that’s a very good insinuation as well. As I’ve said 89 times now, these red-pill goons are not smart so they would absolutely see dissociation as acceptance…besides the entire story is like a caricature of the “fuck the feminism out of the rad-fem” rhetoric, so I’m really digging your actual intention with Elizabeth’s exorcism

Thanks again. It was nice to read a comment that actually engaged a bit with ideology that's being mocked here.

Ur welcome! I enjoy chattering about people’s work! And I’m a bit of a politics nerd so I don’t think I could’ve engaged with this piece any other way

Great story, again!

[Claire]

And I’m a bit of a politics nerd so I don’t think I could’ve engaged with this piece any other way

Now I'm even more curious what you'll think about Late Satisfaction.

[sinfulwords]

And I’m a bit of a politics nerd so I don’t think I could’ve engaged with this piece any other way

Now I'm even more curious what you'll think about Late Satisfaction.

Oh some politics in the Record Chaser universe? Well that’s what’s uuuuuup I’ll let u know all my thoughts and analyses when I read it

[Lucius]

I am very happy to announce that 'Men at War' has become the newest RA Community Favorite!

[AdmiralPiet]

Finally I managed to read it.
On the first attempt (many moons ago) I lost interest after a few paragraphs.
The tone didn't sit right with me at first: Too goofy in a way.

Glad I gave it another chance.
Written to the expected high standards.
The guys came accross as the assholes that they are, especially Jacob. I guess with everything else we read here, all the horrible feminist oppression he suffered at work never happened.
More likely he was a creep towards his female coworkers.

It has been quite a while since I last concerned myself with Peterson. It is hilarious. He is an asshole for sure, but has he truly become that evil to be a prophet for these men?

With Lydia I get the feeling her awakening with the man that "truly dominated [her]" was her being raped, and she is coping with that by telling herself she deserved/needed that.

The sex scenes where good.
In the end I was a bit confused by the excorcism seemingly working, but you made clear in a comment Elizabeth was just not fully there at the moment.

What took me a bit out of it was the surrounding setting.
The men leave behind a lot of evidence. Jacob seems to be his real name? He is linked to her workplace.
Maybe the have taken precautions to deal with that, but a patreon account?

What I would like to read now:
The "Avenging Amazons" getting back at some of them.
Maybe Jacob and Lydia?

[Claire]

@AdmiralPiet Sorry for the late reply! I read your post, went to bed, and forgot to reply the next day.

It has been quite a while since I last concerned myself with Peterson. It is hilarious. He is an asshole for sure, but has he truly become that evil to be a prophet for these men?

Let's call it a satirical exaggeration. But yeah, Jordan Peterson is definitely an important figure in the manosphere, and that's what the story is making fun of. Admittedly, he might have been even more important in November 2024 when I wrote this.

With Lydia I get the feeling her awakening with the man that "truly dominated [her]" was her being raped, and she is coping with that by telling herself she deserved/needed that.

Could be. I never thought that deeply about it. But I was thinking at some point about writing a prequel to Men at War that would have focused on Lydia. But that wouldn't have shown the sex she's refering to here, but how she met the Men at War guys.

What took me a bit out of it was the surrounding setting.
The men leave behind a lot of evidence. Jacob seems to be his real name? He is linked to her workplace.
Maybe the have taken precautions to deal with that, but a patreon account?

I mean, the story is satire. It's deliberately over the top absurd. The entire thing makes no sense the moment you start thinking about it. Live-streaming a gang rape from the victim's bedroom and not from a secret hideout? Setting up the entire production and crew in an apartment/house that they broke in without anybody noticing? Financing the whole operation with a mere $25,000? Nothing here holds up to scrutiny if you assume that these are rogue, radical activists operating in our current world. So I wouldn't think too much about if the logistics make much sense.

What I would like to read now:
The "Avenging Amazons" getting back at some of them.
Maybe Jacob and Lydia?

Feel free to try your hand at it! I don't mind others writing fanfiction to my stories.