Thank you so much for this nice welcome.
I need a bit more time to fully understand how the site and the rating options work. But it's really nice that many great things from the old site have obviously been carried over, and others have been improved!
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I'll try to explain it briefly. You can rate posts of other users in the story boards, both stories and feedback comments. The rating of the first post of a thread is a story's overall rating that you can see left of the title of a story on the topics list. The reputation of a user is just the reputation of all their posts combined.JTCK wrote: Fri Jun 27, 2025 8:52 pm Thank you so much for this nice welcome.
I need a bit more time to fully understand how the site and the rating options work. But it's really nice that many great things from the old site have obviously been carried over, and others have been improved!
Your ability to rate stories is limited by your reputation power. As a new user, you get 6 reputation power points that refresh every 12 hours. The higher your own reputation is, the more reputation power do you gain. You get 1 point of reputation power for each 5 points of reputation you have. And you get another 14 points of reputation power upon becoming a Pillar of the Community. That happens when you reach a reputation of 50.
You can rate stories with 1 to 3 points, leave a comment with your rating if you want to, and you can upgrade ratings later on. So for example, in case you rate a story with 1 point but a later chapter improves your overall impression of the story, you can then upgrade your rating to 2 or 3 points.
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Preamble:
I read a bit less than 3/4ths the way thru Chapter 1, then I skipped forward and read everyone's comments, and your (Author's) responses. The last line I read, before I took a break, was:
“I get that you are confused and frightened. I can’t promise you that you’ll be less frightened in a moment, but I think we can do something about your confusion. Should I start with the questions that you just asked?”
And now I will begin again, at the very beginning of the story, using the following "checklist" as my guide, both for trying to perceive what is being "done", and the style of telling "that"...
1) What did I immediately feel (as a reader, part of the intended audience), after reading this Chapter?
2) What I most love about what I read, and/or what is my most vivid memory that I will keep?
3) What would I change, or how would MY style have dictated a "different telling"? What did I learn "about writing"?
4) Did I get off on this? Why?
That is, I intend for my comments to be a "beginner's (me) college level book report", for a "creative writing class".
Chapter 1:
On first blush, my mind examined the mechanics of the situation. My experience is that women (& persons in general) don't come out of unconsciousness, drugs, alcohol, or injury, unaware firstly that they are "bound", cuffed, or confined. For the first 1/4th of chapter 1, that was my overriding question.
The 2nd thing that occurred to me, and particularly after I had read all the comments made to date (within THIS forum), was a surprised realization that YOU CARE ABOUT THESE PEOPLE, before they are even developed a bit. (I come to care about "my creations" only after some development, some familiarity)
Thirdly, MY talents as a writer are spent scribbling onto a "yellow post-it note", attempting to be as sparing of description and dialogue as pleases me. To begin character development, and interior dialogs, immediately, is something that my "male perspective and story-telling style" usually finds as secondary in importance to a newspaper-like "who what where when" initial orientation.
I find it "delicious" that Claire is captive, I'm hoping to find out what Mark's going to "do with her", mildly disappointed that Mark's not going to "own" this person for "at least a month or two". But I know by this point that this will be a "long story", whether by detailed analysis or by a "lot happening, perhaps in detailed description". I'm not, thru chapter 1, feeling an urge to touch my own genitals, nor fantasize about what is going to happen, but rather feeling I've just picked up a good book that I'm going to enjoy, and spend some time with. As before (maybe at RU), I'm in awe of people, like "Lt Broccoli" or some of the others, who can carry a sustained account without degenerating into fewer and fewer details, and less and less enthusiasm, using more and more the technique of "implying 'what followed' or 'what has just happened'." (As opposed to ROLEPLAYING, which stories I have often come away from being very satisfied with my contributions. THIS was my fascination with the 'AI GIRLFRIEND' dialog, It felt like 'story creation' as a 'roleplay', albeit with the 'smart typewriter'.)
Claire is 'analytical'. Particularly brave and strong. Mark is reserved and mysterious. I don't yet know if for him this is a 'sexual theft or assualt upon an innocent' (except what I gleaned from comments that I previewed later in the story), or if there is a 'spy' or 'sci fi' or 'phycology' component to come. I TRUST Mark's ability to 'keep his own (self-imposed) rules'. I assume that he's telling the truth that Claire will survive, relatively 'unharmed' (sarcastic or joking downplay of the harm to body and psyche or a sexual assault.) But I LIKE and empathize with CLAIRE. (Yet with no anticipation that THIS will diminish my sexual gratification in reading about HER being 'abused' later on in the story.)
End of Chapter 1
Chapter 2:
For the first half of this, we are led up to Claire saying "I don't want to be raped." And then Mark says, "I know" and is "defeated"? I was struggling and trying to call up a forceful suspension of disbelief, and my mind was saying, "Here is what SHOULD have happened..." And then, moments later, YOU delivered PRECISELY THAT. (If the Rabbit has said to the FOX, "I don't want to be chased", the FOX would say, "Go ahead, I'll give you a 30-second head start.") ... DEE-LICIOUS!
Like someone watching a goal scored on sports-TV, mentally my fists go up, "YES!" Then like a transparent overlay, the rest of the chapter fit itself over my expectations, what I judged to be true and authentic. (MY fantasy would have had Mark step to her, and ask whether she wanted help to pull the blanket over her for the next 30 minutes, or... whether she would give permission to have the blanket folded and placed on the nearby table, so that I - as Mark - could revel in her nakedness and helplessness for the next half an hour? Leaving the choice to HER, imparting an illusion of SOME minor control over her situation.)
The last part of the chapter, up to near the end, was Claire thinking of the "possibilities" for escape, perhaps to convince him to change his plans. Again this was particularly insightful, this was not 'filler' to the story, but was intelligently crafted desperation.
At that point, I missed the chapter, in sadness that it had been used up, but it left me wanting to hurry to the next, to hurry the arrival of Claire's tribulations. I was loving Claire, Mark was an unknown and not controllable, yet acting as MY representative in closing in on Claire's boundaries and private spaces.
End of Chapter 2
Chapter 3:
Here, we see some analysis of Mark himself, and of his philosophy of rape. Here I must accept the author's definitions on the subject, as they diverge from MY experience. We see all three, Mark, Claire the character, and Claire the author sharing a similar set of moral precepts. Absolute sets of "rights" and "wrongs", from which the author is struggling to have Mark justify his "departing what is good". (Completely absent - it seems to ME - are the elements of psychopathy, schizophrenia, atheism and the lack of a moral base. Also - or in addition - there seems to be an absence of Mark's being totally 'evil' or 'demonic'.)
As a reader, I have noted the description of Claire being a math student, serious and hard-working, yet generous with her time, and sociable when called by her friends for a "night out". I'm left feeling that "the number of minutes to midnight" was a 'red herring', and a distraction from the ticking of the clock, in it's inexorable approach to the big 'deadline'. One thing I miss here, is Mark's not asking her to describe her feelings about what is going to happen to her. Asking what is she willing to bargain with? What allowance would she ask him to make, and what would she offer to reciprocate?
Mark's "set of rules for himself" seem absolutely RIGHT ON, in two respects; they guarantee staying within THIS forum's guidelines, and they assure the audience of a 'safe space', where there is no worry that things will 'get extreme'. (How many GOOD writers, back on RU, were there that had horrific scenes that challenged our enjoyment of the author's talents?)
The 'humor' here was not extravagant, nor a distraction from the narrative. I felt there was a light enough touch, that it was not 'out of place', but rather made the reading more enjoyable (less flat, less monotone). Among my favorite paragraphs from this chapter, whether 'humor' or 'wisdom' was, "He needed a sophisticated sex toy to keep his marathon of orgasms... That toy was her. 20 minutes until..." THIS very much DOES touch upon the motivation and mindset of somebody acting out the supreme selfishness of 'raping' another person, regardless of the consequences for that 'other'.
It doesn't feel like it's midnight yet, so I wonder if we'll see penetration in chapter 4?
End of Chapter 3
Chapter 4:
LOL. I had wished for, in chapter 3, "One thing I miss here, is Mark's not asking her to describe her feelings about what is going to happen to her. Asking what is she willing to bargain with? What allowance would she ask him to make, and what would she offer to reciprocate?" I see that I'm getting precisely what I had wished for, with that earlier comment I made, now in chapter 4. Mark is making preliminary preparations, in a way that forces Claire to think about what is about to happen.
It is at THIS point that I begin to be personally aroused by the story. Mark's hand under her butt, lifting her into the 'bridge' so that he can stuff a cushion under her. (I wanted, in MY mind, for him to peck some kisses to inner thighs and to clit mound. With plenty of tongue action.) But Mark lowers her butt to the cushion, then teases about that position making her a better 'cum receptacle' for his use.
"He had her finally prepared. As there was still some time before the official start, he decided to inspect the merchandise in front of him. He couldn’t wait to invade her but that didn’t mean he wasn’t interested in the rest of her body. Raping her meant to him that he’d own her body in its entirety." I very much identify, and am now only 50% an analyst, and now also 50% invested audience, beginning to hunger for the "owning of her" while using her as a "sophisticated sex toy". The journey of his hands down her body, and her reactions, are a 'turn on' to me. (I find myself constantly surprised by the frequent reference to, and exaggeration of, "pre-cum", in THIS and other stories. It used to be that such references were from an urban culture very alien to anything I frequented.)
I enjoy the 'tour', the 'inventory' of her body. Each move is described in enough detail to avoid making this seem like 'ticking items off of a list'. Somewhere we more-or-less lose Claire's narration, and she becomes terse, commenting only in acknowledging his exploration of her body, and the minutes ticking down to zero.
The chapter ends with, "Claire's fear at the end of this chapter still tugs at my heart strings. I remember thinking while writing: What am I doing to this poor girl?" An exciting and engrossing chapter, while leaving one wishing that there was more of Claire's internal reactions and thoughts.
End of Chapter 4
(I will open a new comment, to begin analysis of chapter 5)
I read a bit less than 3/4ths the way thru Chapter 1, then I skipped forward and read everyone's comments, and your (Author's) responses. The last line I read, before I took a break, was:
“I get that you are confused and frightened. I can’t promise you that you’ll be less frightened in a moment, but I think we can do something about your confusion. Should I start with the questions that you just asked?”
And now I will begin again, at the very beginning of the story, using the following "checklist" as my guide, both for trying to perceive what is being "done", and the style of telling "that"...
1) What did I immediately feel (as a reader, part of the intended audience), after reading this Chapter?
2) What I most love about what I read, and/or what is my most vivid memory that I will keep?
3) What would I change, or how would MY style have dictated a "different telling"? What did I learn "about writing"?
4) Did I get off on this? Why?
That is, I intend for my comments to be a "beginner's (me) college level book report", for a "creative writing class".
Chapter 1:
On first blush, my mind examined the mechanics of the situation. My experience is that women (& persons in general) don't come out of unconsciousness, drugs, alcohol, or injury, unaware firstly that they are "bound", cuffed, or confined. For the first 1/4th of chapter 1, that was my overriding question.
The 2nd thing that occurred to me, and particularly after I had read all the comments made to date (within THIS forum), was a surprised realization that YOU CARE ABOUT THESE PEOPLE, before they are even developed a bit. (I come to care about "my creations" only after some development, some familiarity)
Thirdly, MY talents as a writer are spent scribbling onto a "yellow post-it note", attempting to be as sparing of description and dialogue as pleases me. To begin character development, and interior dialogs, immediately, is something that my "male perspective and story-telling style" usually finds as secondary in importance to a newspaper-like "who what where when" initial orientation.
I find it "delicious" that Claire is captive, I'm hoping to find out what Mark's going to "do with her", mildly disappointed that Mark's not going to "own" this person for "at least a month or two". But I know by this point that this will be a "long story", whether by detailed analysis or by a "lot happening, perhaps in detailed description". I'm not, thru chapter 1, feeling an urge to touch my own genitals, nor fantasize about what is going to happen, but rather feeling I've just picked up a good book that I'm going to enjoy, and spend some time with. As before (maybe at RU), I'm in awe of people, like "Lt Broccoli" or some of the others, who can carry a sustained account without degenerating into fewer and fewer details, and less and less enthusiasm, using more and more the technique of "implying 'what followed' or 'what has just happened'." (As opposed to ROLEPLAYING, which stories I have often come away from being very satisfied with my contributions. THIS was my fascination with the 'AI GIRLFRIEND' dialog, It felt like 'story creation' as a 'roleplay', albeit with the 'smart typewriter'.)
Claire is 'analytical'. Particularly brave and strong. Mark is reserved and mysterious. I don't yet know if for him this is a 'sexual theft or assualt upon an innocent' (except what I gleaned from comments that I previewed later in the story), or if there is a 'spy' or 'sci fi' or 'phycology' component to come. I TRUST Mark's ability to 'keep his own (self-imposed) rules'. I assume that he's telling the truth that Claire will survive, relatively 'unharmed' (sarcastic or joking downplay of the harm to body and psyche or a sexual assault.) But I LIKE and empathize with CLAIRE. (Yet with no anticipation that THIS will diminish my sexual gratification in reading about HER being 'abused' later on in the story.)
End of Chapter 1
Chapter 2:
For the first half of this, we are led up to Claire saying "I don't want to be raped." And then Mark says, "I know" and is "defeated"? I was struggling and trying to call up a forceful suspension of disbelief, and my mind was saying, "Here is what SHOULD have happened..." And then, moments later, YOU delivered PRECISELY THAT. (If the Rabbit has said to the FOX, "I don't want to be chased", the FOX would say, "Go ahead, I'll give you a 30-second head start.") ... DEE-LICIOUS!
Like someone watching a goal scored on sports-TV, mentally my fists go up, "YES!" Then like a transparent overlay, the rest of the chapter fit itself over my expectations, what I judged to be true and authentic. (MY fantasy would have had Mark step to her, and ask whether she wanted help to pull the blanket over her for the next 30 minutes, or... whether she would give permission to have the blanket folded and placed on the nearby table, so that I - as Mark - could revel in her nakedness and helplessness for the next half an hour? Leaving the choice to HER, imparting an illusion of SOME minor control over her situation.)
The last part of the chapter, up to near the end, was Claire thinking of the "possibilities" for escape, perhaps to convince him to change his plans. Again this was particularly insightful, this was not 'filler' to the story, but was intelligently crafted desperation.
At that point, I missed the chapter, in sadness that it had been used up, but it left me wanting to hurry to the next, to hurry the arrival of Claire's tribulations. I was loving Claire, Mark was an unknown and not controllable, yet acting as MY representative in closing in on Claire's boundaries and private spaces.
End of Chapter 2
Chapter 3:
Here, we see some analysis of Mark himself, and of his philosophy of rape. Here I must accept the author's definitions on the subject, as they diverge from MY experience. We see all three, Mark, Claire the character, and Claire the author sharing a similar set of moral precepts. Absolute sets of "rights" and "wrongs", from which the author is struggling to have Mark justify his "departing what is good". (Completely absent - it seems to ME - are the elements of psychopathy, schizophrenia, atheism and the lack of a moral base. Also - or in addition - there seems to be an absence of Mark's being totally 'evil' or 'demonic'.)
As a reader, I have noted the description of Claire being a math student, serious and hard-working, yet generous with her time, and sociable when called by her friends for a "night out". I'm left feeling that "the number of minutes to midnight" was a 'red herring', and a distraction from the ticking of the clock, in it's inexorable approach to the big 'deadline'. One thing I miss here, is Mark's not asking her to describe her feelings about what is going to happen to her. Asking what is she willing to bargain with? What allowance would she ask him to make, and what would she offer to reciprocate?
Mark's "set of rules for himself" seem absolutely RIGHT ON, in two respects; they guarantee staying within THIS forum's guidelines, and they assure the audience of a 'safe space', where there is no worry that things will 'get extreme'. (How many GOOD writers, back on RU, were there that had horrific scenes that challenged our enjoyment of the author's talents?)
The 'humor' here was not extravagant, nor a distraction from the narrative. I felt there was a light enough touch, that it was not 'out of place', but rather made the reading more enjoyable (less flat, less monotone). Among my favorite paragraphs from this chapter, whether 'humor' or 'wisdom' was, "He needed a sophisticated sex toy to keep his marathon of orgasms... That toy was her. 20 minutes until..." THIS very much DOES touch upon the motivation and mindset of somebody acting out the supreme selfishness of 'raping' another person, regardless of the consequences for that 'other'.
It doesn't feel like it's midnight yet, so I wonder if we'll see penetration in chapter 4?
End of Chapter 3
Chapter 4:
LOL. I had wished for, in chapter 3, "One thing I miss here, is Mark's not asking her to describe her feelings about what is going to happen to her. Asking what is she willing to bargain with? What allowance would she ask him to make, and what would she offer to reciprocate?" I see that I'm getting precisely what I had wished for, with that earlier comment I made, now in chapter 4. Mark is making preliminary preparations, in a way that forces Claire to think about what is about to happen.
It is at THIS point that I begin to be personally aroused by the story. Mark's hand under her butt, lifting her into the 'bridge' so that he can stuff a cushion under her. (I wanted, in MY mind, for him to peck some kisses to inner thighs and to clit mound. With plenty of tongue action.) But Mark lowers her butt to the cushion, then teases about that position making her a better 'cum receptacle' for his use.
"He had her finally prepared. As there was still some time before the official start, he decided to inspect the merchandise in front of him. He couldn’t wait to invade her but that didn’t mean he wasn’t interested in the rest of her body. Raping her meant to him that he’d own her body in its entirety." I very much identify, and am now only 50% an analyst, and now also 50% invested audience, beginning to hunger for the "owning of her" while using her as a "sophisticated sex toy". The journey of his hands down her body, and her reactions, are a 'turn on' to me. (I find myself constantly surprised by the frequent reference to, and exaggeration of, "pre-cum", in THIS and other stories. It used to be that such references were from an urban culture very alien to anything I frequented.)
I enjoy the 'tour', the 'inventory' of her body. Each move is described in enough detail to avoid making this seem like 'ticking items off of a list'. Somewhere we more-or-less lose Claire's narration, and she becomes terse, commenting only in acknowledging his exploration of her body, and the minutes ticking down to zero.
The chapter ends with, "Claire's fear at the end of this chapter still tugs at my heart strings. I remember thinking while writing: What am I doing to this poor girl?" An exciting and engrossing chapter, while leaving one wishing that there was more of Claire's internal reactions and thoughts.
End of Chapter 4
(I will open a new comment, to begin analysis of chapter 5)
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Re: Record Chaser
@Neighbor I'm glad you seem to be having fun with the story. After reading your feedback so far, I'm mostly curious why you took a break after 3/4 of the first chapter and then started to read the comments of other readers? Weren't you afraid of spoilers?
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Certainly there was an interest in "reading" and "discovering" the story. (Which might be affected by "spoilers")
However, my MAIN motivation was to ANALYZE THE WRITING, THE TONE OF THE STORY, and in general analyze "what the author was trying to do".
As prelude to this, I wanted to examine what others were looking for, and what they found. What were OTHERS in the audience, seeing?
I am now about to tackle chapter 3, and then will jump to my "diary" and give my immediate specific reactions.
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Chapter 5:
So, chapter 4 slipped away after whispering, "0 minutes till midnight. He started pushing into her."
Ok. I'm up for it, let's go look at Chapter 5 !!!
"He started pushing into her", and "his cock’s head had crashed into her constricted vaginal walls", I totally mis-read this and had some moment's confusion, thinking this was telling me that "INTO" meant "he was IN". After about 3 're-reads', I see that "crashing into" means HE DIDN'T GET IN YET. Another confusion FOR ME, has been the statement about how "having a cock looks so painful", and how "pushing thru a hymen, tearing the girl's flesh, must be painful for the male."
Then Claire tries to talk him out of unsuccessful attempts at penetration (using "pre-cum" as his sole lubricant, lol), and he finds this as a distraction. (I then imagine a rabbit's shreiks of terror causing the FOX to stop and hunker down saying, "Well then, I won't continue chasing this rabbit".) She feels him "slip in, between her vaginal contractions", as opposed to "She felt her body's initial defenses tear, blood adding to his lubrications, as his cock began slipping in, a fraction of an inch with each thrust." (Because my purpose was to ANALYZE, I have noted in detail, what I consider to be MINOR OBJECTIONS.)
My mind is enjoying the story, while working to dispel any objections or disbelief. I am loving the details of Claire's thought processes, of the observations and feelings. I try to take in stride that Claire thinks she sees "pain" in Mark, because it was "so difficult to get into her". It threw me again, when we find that Mark is just now assuming the "missionary position" because it was his thought that this position might "cause him to slip out". I stop and think this over, then decide this is just a detail that I must accept to stay in tune with the narrative.
Mark puts all his weight onto Claire, laying on top of her, his chest rubbing against her tits. (Trying to remember if, I EVER laid my full weight on the person under me. Realizing that MY 'rules' would generally find that 'unacceptable'. LOL)
For me, THIS was the hottest sentence: "He finally had her where he wanted her. Her hand and feet, her arms and legs restricted by cuffs. Her upper body constraint by his own. Her head fixated by his hands, forcing her to either look at the ceiling or to close her eyes. All the while, he was staking her abused hole over and over again. What had once been her vagina was now his cunt."
On finishing Chapter 5, "The difference between sex and rape was: Good sex ends in pleasure. But a good rape… A good rape ends in victory." VERY satisfactory. This overlaps my views perfectly.
I have very much felt "represented" by the last half of this chapter (my mind only stopping to object whenever this process was described as 'painful' to Mark). Claire, she is DOMINATED, she is OWNED. 'Life', according to THIS story, was "GOOD". Very much a bonus that the perpetrator is not 'slapping' or 'cursing' or belittling her. (Wouldn't THAT diminish the value of his 'conquest'?)
Chapter 5, of the first 5 chapters, I agree is the most likely to cause people to masturbate.
End of Chapter 5
(This is the end of my analysis. This was an interesting story to read.)
So, chapter 4 slipped away after whispering, "0 minutes till midnight. He started pushing into her."
Ok. I'm up for it, let's go look at Chapter 5 !!!
"He started pushing into her", and "his cock’s head had crashed into her constricted vaginal walls", I totally mis-read this and had some moment's confusion, thinking this was telling me that "INTO" meant "he was IN". After about 3 're-reads', I see that "crashing into" means HE DIDN'T GET IN YET. Another confusion FOR ME, has been the statement about how "having a cock looks so painful", and how "pushing thru a hymen, tearing the girl's flesh, must be painful for the male."
Then Claire tries to talk him out of unsuccessful attempts at penetration (using "pre-cum" as his sole lubricant, lol), and he finds this as a distraction. (I then imagine a rabbit's shreiks of terror causing the FOX to stop and hunker down saying, "Well then, I won't continue chasing this rabbit".) She feels him "slip in, between her vaginal contractions", as opposed to "She felt her body's initial defenses tear, blood adding to his lubrications, as his cock began slipping in, a fraction of an inch with each thrust." (Because my purpose was to ANALYZE, I have noted in detail, what I consider to be MINOR OBJECTIONS.)
My mind is enjoying the story, while working to dispel any objections or disbelief. I am loving the details of Claire's thought processes, of the observations and feelings. I try to take in stride that Claire thinks she sees "pain" in Mark, because it was "so difficult to get into her". It threw me again, when we find that Mark is just now assuming the "missionary position" because it was his thought that this position might "cause him to slip out". I stop and think this over, then decide this is just a detail that I must accept to stay in tune with the narrative.
Mark puts all his weight onto Claire, laying on top of her, his chest rubbing against her tits. (Trying to remember if, I EVER laid my full weight on the person under me. Realizing that MY 'rules' would generally find that 'unacceptable'. LOL)
For me, THIS was the hottest sentence: "He finally had her where he wanted her. Her hand and feet, her arms and legs restricted by cuffs. Her upper body constraint by his own. Her head fixated by his hands, forcing her to either look at the ceiling or to close her eyes. All the while, he was staking her abused hole over and over again. What had once been her vagina was now his cunt."
On finishing Chapter 5, "The difference between sex and rape was: Good sex ends in pleasure. But a good rape… A good rape ends in victory." VERY satisfactory. This overlaps my views perfectly.
I have very much felt "represented" by the last half of this chapter (my mind only stopping to object whenever this process was described as 'painful' to Mark). Claire, she is DOMINATED, she is OWNED. 'Life', according to THIS story, was "GOOD". Very much a bonus that the perpetrator is not 'slapping' or 'cursing' or belittling her. (Wouldn't THAT diminish the value of his 'conquest'?)
Chapter 5, of the first 5 chapters, I agree is the most likely to cause people to masturbate.
End of Chapter 5
(This is the end of my analysis. This was an interesting story to read.)
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Re: Record Chaser
@Neighbor There are two moments in your post that can be read as you actually having raped a woman and are now referring to what that experience was like in comparison to what the story describes. I'm sure I must be misreading this and that these two passages are not referring to what you felt while raping a woman:
Neighbor wrote: Fri Jul 11, 2025 12:42 pm I find this a totally alien concept. (For ME, the thrill of this feeling was a highpoint in life.) "pushing his dick over and over against an unrelenting wall was not his definition of a fun time", for ME, is so against everything I have known over a lifetime. For ME, this was the ESSENCE of a 'good time'.
Neighbor wrote: Fri Jul 11, 2025 12:42 pm Trying to remember if, even during a 'non-con', I laid my full weight on the person under me. Realizing that MY 'rules' find that 'unacceptable'. LOL
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It took me only 237 days to write chapter 8 after the release of chapter 7 on December 23 2024. I'm sorry for the long wait.
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Chapter 8 – Good Girl
Since the forum is closing soon, I'm migrating my stories to Archive Of Our Own (AO3) and Literotica. Read the rest of Record Chaser here: Please support the story by leaving a kudos on AO3, thanks!
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Chapter 8 – Good Girl
Since the forum is closing soon, I'm migrating my stories to Archive Of Our Own (AO3) and Literotica. Read the rest of Record Chaser here: Please support the story by leaving a kudos on AO3, thanks!
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Re: Record Chaser - New Chapter!
@Claire
The long wait was truly worth it. In my opinion, this is the best chapter of the story.
Even if it treats the act of repeated rape rather incidentally. The dialogue and Mark's thoughts are much more interesting.
And what a humiliation for Claire to let him kiss her while he stares into her eyes and fucks her. In my opinion, a moment like that cannot be surpassed, no matter how cruel the rape.
The long wait was truly worth it. In my opinion, this is the best chapter of the story.
Even if it treats the act of repeated rape rather incidentally. The dialogue and Mark's thoughts are much more interesting.
And what a humiliation for Claire to let him kiss her while he stares into her eyes and fucks her. In my opinion, a moment like that cannot be surpassed, no matter how cruel the rape.