Livia Preston - Witch's Orgy.

[Nickamano]

SIX

Robert awoke suddenly, wide awake and mildly confused. He looked around. He was lying naked on Livia’s pallet. He was alone, Richard and Marcus nowhere to be seen. Their clothes were gone. Robert guessed they must have woken up already and headed home. But, Livia was nowhere to be found either, even though her dress was folded on the back of one of the dining chairs.
Robert got up and looked around. The dawn was beginning to throw its meagre light into the woods, though there were only a couple of birds calling the dawn forth. Still half asleep, Robert went outside and wandered naked through the woods for a while, keeping within sight of the Preston house.
There was no breeze, and though the morning air felt bracing on his naked skin, the day was warming quickly. He could faintly hear Livia’s soft singing voice on the wind. He followed the sound down to the stream to the rear of the house. There was a series of flat stone steps from the shallow bank to the clear water. And there she was, beautiful beyond words and pale as the driven snow, standing naked up to her knees in the stream gently washing the nights orgy from her flesh. Beautiful beyond words, shapely and delicate and pale as the driven snow. Her long dark hair almost black, having dipped herself fully under the water.

Robert took the steps and waded in, the cold fresh water kissing his feet and legs, had he waded over to join her. She turned and smiled at him, opened her arms to invite him into her embrace. They kissed - long and gentle, then began to pour cupped palms of water over each other, a mutual bathing that almost felt like a baptism, in the cool waters of the shallow flowing stream, talking quietly, enjoying the peace of the early dawn and each other’s company.

Epilogue

A day or two after the orgy, Master Pendragon becomes acquainted with a new Norman family who have just moved into the county. They take up residence on land adjoining Pendragons’. Their daughter is seventeen when they first meet. She is still seventeen when Master Pendragon declares his undying love for her. The girl's name is Helene. However, the prospect of marriage is poor - as Helene's father instantly takes a dislike to Pendragon.

Richard is drinking at the inn when he meets and gets talking to a milking maid. A relative of Scrupe’s youngest sister, he rarely saw her as she rose early before the dawn and went to sleep early and barely left her father’s farm. They courted for a few weeks during which the girl found herself pregnant by Richard. So, he was quickly forced - by her parents and his own - to wed her. His life was set in stone then, and after overcoming the loss of his freedom and all the potential futures lost to him, Richard found himself mostly content, settling down with a pretty young wife and young baby son.

Marcus was the one who Vicky Hayes finally chooses to wed. Once her parents are over the prospect of Pendragon, who ceases to make his unannounced visits once he has set eyes on the Norman newcomer, Helene.
Marcus chases Vicky continually, doing his utmost to woo her and making full use of Livia’s concoction. Finally, she relinquishes and, with her father’s reluctant blessing, they are married soon afterward.

Despite Livia previous premonitions about their relationship, Robert continued his love affair with Livia. The two grew increasingly close and seeing each other in secret almost daily. Robert and Livia would have liked nothing more than to wed, and live together, but with the villagers’ barely restrained fear of the Preston women, they both knew it would prove an impossibility. Robert’s parents shared everyone else’s underlying fear of the Preston’s and their powers, therefore Robert’s and Livia’s love affair had to remain a secret.

Six months into their love affair, they were stuck by a tragedy. Robert is struck down with an ailment. He is quarantined though it doesn't seem likely that he will survive. First there are accusations that perhaps the Preston’s are responsible, but Marcus and Richard stand up for the family, and stamps down any rumours about curses and witchcraft. As the illness worseness Marcus insisted that they take his brother to the Preston witches but his parents were too afraid, and Robert too weak.
Still, the young man’s only desire was to see Livia before he dies. On his very deathbed he, summons the last of his strength, breaks his quarantine and over-night staggers through the village and into the woods, to see Livia. She isn't afraid of him passing on his malady, her ability protects her from such diseases.
However, Livia is shocked and weeps at the effect the illness had had on Robert. She desperately wants to do something to help him. He wants only to die in her arms.

Still, she confesses that there on only one way she can help him, one single grain of hope. It comes in the form of a spell. It is the only thing Livia can use to help him; a spell that her grandmother knows - to change a human into a cat. Something that the disease cannot affect.
He agrees and, as his body breathes its final breath, it is transformed into a sleek and handsome black tomcat. Livia promises that she will keep him at her side and will love him for the rest of his days.
The young witch and her cat 'familiar' are inseparable from that moment. And she turns wrathfully aggressive to anyone who tries to hurt her ‘pet’.
On Livia’s birthday, her grandmother even grants her a gift of her own, temporarily transforming her into a female feline. And for a day and a night, so she and Robert can spend time together in compatible forms.

They remain inseparable until cat-Robert’s death three years later, which is only a month after the natural demise of her grandmother. It takes Livia a long time to get over this dual loss.

Eventually, alone, poor and lonely, Livia turns her attentions toward young Master Pendragon, who, the previous year, inherited all his father's wealth and lands. She begins to ache for Pendragon, a powerful noble, as rich and powerful as he is handsome, the promise of him offering all she had lost, security and acceptance, respect from the local serfs, riches and a good lifestyle, a handsome virile man between her thighs.
Unfortunately, Pendragon had eyes only for the maiden Helene. However, her father still stands against their betrothal. Though Pendragon continues to try and wins the family over.

Livia sees an opportunity to better her life and to obtain the man she now burns for…


The End.

[Nickamano]

I'll admit, the ending is a bit weak. If my plan was to do a full rewrite from scratch I probably wouldn't have rushed the ending so much. There should have been a lot more emotional content between Livia and Robert as he falls ill and is transformed into her 'familiar'.

I'll throw in a couple of references to where this all came from (hopefully including photos) when I have a bit more time.

[LaLia]

"A bit weak" is a very negative way of putting it. You didn't give it quite as much time, and it was short, but as an ending, it's still okay. All in all, well written...Criticism? Too much of a "love story" for my taste, but that's just a matter of taste.

[Nickamano]

Livia meeting Pendragon.


Livia and Scrupe inside the tavern.

This story came from an old Roger Corman film from 1957 called "The Undead" (the plot is about past-life regression) and Livia is the villain of the film. She was portrayed by the insurmountable Allison Hayes (the original Attack of the Fifty Foot Woman) possibly the sexiest witch ever put to film.
So, the ending of my story is meant to be a set up for the beginning of the film.

[Claire]

Now I read part 4. It was still very well written, but I enjoyed part three much more because the narration was actually involved in the sex. This mostly detached observer perspective isn't working as well for me as the more intimate perspective of chapter 3.

I think chapter 4 could do with some proof reading though. For example:

“Lovely...” Marcus added. “Lovely as the dawning sun on a spring morn... over… a dew-covered field of… wheat." Marcus added trying to capture a poetic in the moment.

Ever the poet, Marcus attempted to capture the poetry of the moment

Here something seems to have gone wrong, like two attempts to write a similar line were tested and the discarded one didn't get removed?

Richard was thoroughly excited by what he was witnessing. He hurried to lever his throbbing erection free of his breeches and started to masturbate. He forced him elf to go slow, to try to keep up with the Lord-ling’s rampant lust.

That's just one typo and I think I spotted a few more while reading, but this one stood out because it made me stumble a bit.

[Nickamano]

I take your point about the tested line then forgot to remove one. I think I messed up there.

Obviously "him elf" should read "himself", its probably an auto-correct situation that I should have caught.
At the same time, if we're going to start flagging up spelling and grammar issues in stories on here, probably every story on here is going to have multiple flags. I always find when it comes to online fiction and fan fiction, spelling and grammar issues are just something we all have to accept.
I do personally try my best with spelling and grammar because I tend to use my fan fiction writing as practice, and I try to take what I post as seriously as my published works, but at the same time I'm generally not working through 4 or 5 drafts before posting.

[Claire]

@Nickamano I didn't mean this as some harsh criticism but as two minor points in the text where I stumbled briefly. I would never go over every typo, missing comma or whatever small mistake. So I apologize if that post came across as overly critical or nitpicky. That was not my intention.

[Vela Nanashi]

You should try to get an index made for your story parts, to have in your first post, if you need help with that you can ask about that.

--- part 1

A lot of good descriptions that I don't have a lot to say about, of the village and desires, hopes and dreams of the young adults, and families, good going. I do particularly like how the descriptions of Vicky is very much matching how the young men would put it if they were poets

Also I like that the language you use has an old time feel to it, word choices and all that, good work.

I will of course whine about not having first person perspective, but I have a feeling you want to be in all the young men's minds and emotions and in Vicky's too, so third person probably is the best for that, just harder for me to entirely attach to someone, I feel a bit like a bird in one of the trees, observing the humans from afar.

They should have followed, as I am sure when Pendragon has his breaches down he would be possible for three of them to overcome, then again that might be a bad idea for the whole village, if a lordling got himself hurt by the locals.

Ancient oldsters are fixtures of the place eh?

Interesting, yeah two groups of men that are almost ready to come to blows and toss in a woman, good way to get trouble started in earnest.

--- end part 1

I also noticed Pendragon like Claire did, but I am choosing to let your story stand alone, unless you specify in it exactly who it is

--- part 2

Good description of Livia there, in a nicely playful way.

Also all men who are into women, and women who are into women take an intelligence debuff of -10 if the make their will save and -20 if they don't. If their temporary int score drops to 3 or less they start drooling.

That smile, she knows what effect she has on the men.

bruising his lips with his own -> I assume one of the his is supposed to be her, probably the first

Wardrobe in that room full of skeletons with dry skin tightly hugging them as she is giving them a very wonderful moment before draining their life?

Cute that the soldier thinks he can slay someone who can ignite a man with a wave of her hand.

Nice chaotic description of the bar fight and yeah a fire in probably a wood building is not fun, so its good that Scrupe is dealing with that.

True bravery is when you are scared shitless but you still confront the thing you are scared of.

Oh I think the dress ate the men to refresh its nice supple human skin

--- end part 2

To answer @LaLia a bit:

In most countries during middle ages: men and women were shorter than they are today on average, due to sub optimal nutrition, there was the chance every year that you could starve to death if anything went wrong with the harvest and fertility of your flock of animals, in addition to poor nutrition there were more diseases that affected people's health and less ways to treat those things, honestly even a homeless person in our societies in some ways live better than kings and nobles in general from that era, more better food, better medical care, etc, and that you would not every day have enough food to fully sate your hunger, and if that happens when you are a child you will loose height and other things in adulthood.

--- part 3

Lol hot foreplay, and bad timing of his brother and friend then again maybe they can all join into the fun that Livia clearly still wants to have. Oh pretending to be asleep ok

I am glad this part makes up for the off screen horror sex with some hot sex

Sometimes taking it slow builds intensity of the sensation, letting one fully feel it, and want more

Livia gently milking/massaging his cock is very hot

Very hot and also realistic sex I think at least. Using some of those cock manipulating techniques to make him last longer, but maybe she should have given some attention to her clit if she wanted to catch up with him, but yeah at his age he will be ready quickly again.

Very hot part

--- end part 3

--- part 4

Well described forth part but I am not enjoying it, Pendragon and Richard are not good people... Poor Vicky.

him elf -> his self

pushed her against stone wall and then wood beam?

I have a hard time understanding abuse like that, bruising and damaging what you find beautiful...

slapped -> slaps

full gloves ? that is not a term I have heard before for breasts

--- end of part 4

I think Vicky's scene in part 4 was rape, at least that was my impression, I hope that Livia helps save her somehow, or that the boys handle the lordling, but perhaps that is a very bad idea for the village.

--- part 5

you'll miss be missing supper

emtions -> emotions

love the writing in this part so far, though I have a feeling Richard will be trouble, as it would not surprise me if he lost, if the potion truly shows the truth of the man, and then he will be jealous of the brothers.

A lust potion and young virile healthy men, that is probably not the most sane combination, very hot though, so I got stuck in reading mode, making the commentary suffer, but yeah hot writing

asserting his helmet her lips - is a bit awkward, I mean I know what you mean though, time to read more hot stuff

her crown sealing the 'o' of Livia's mouth? his?

hot hot

breath aging choke ?

Very hot part made up for the not so happy feels of part 4 for me :0

--- end part 5

Yes @Claire this is a hot story

--- Part 6 & Epilogue

Pale as the driven snow repeats,.

Yeah I don't like the ending and epilogue super much, part 3 and 5 and the very short part 6 were good though

Keep writing stories, this one was good overall

I would have been happier if it was a consensual love story only But yeah I am a bit weird there I guess

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I hear you on spelling and grammar mistakes, I am sure I do them too, and I only wrote them down here to help you if you want to edit them, I will try not to mention them in the future if you prefer I don't.

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Thank you for a great story, now I need to go rate the story and posts that I liked the most

[Nickamano]

Huge gratitude Vela Nanashi for the exemplary and detailed feedback!

I'm going to make myself a complete hypocrite now by saying thank you for the spelling error flags. And when I have the chance I will make the adjustments to improve the reading experience for the future (sorry Claire).

[Claire]

@Nickamano It took me a while, but I finally finished reading your story. I enjoyed the 5th chapter a lot! I finally got that dialogue and that bit more of personality from the characters. I really liked that. And the sex was great again with the way you described it, though I still wished I could have lived a little more in the characters' heads while they were at it.

I was wondering whether you like writing for a medieval, almost fairytale like setting like this because it allows you to use some more old fashioned or achaic vocabulary in the sex scenes without it sounding odd?

The 6th chapter does feel a little rushed, but I think you said that this is a prequel to another story? I think in that case it is fine. Now what I am really curious about: Where is your next story? You can't drop some 20 year old story on us and not show us what modern Nickamano's writing is like in comparison!