Record Chaser

[AdmiralPiet]

But the more interesting question to ask is: Is there something a victim could do to rattle Freya? That is ultimately where stories are told, in the moments where characters are thrown off balance because something exposes their vulnerability.

That is a very good question, and one that exposes some weakness in my character creation.

In Warhammer 40k the citizens of the Imperium of Man are very religious and xenophobic. They hate the alien, the witch, the mutant, and the heretic.
But they still have morals. Rape and murder are still crimes that are prosecuted.
The followers of chaos quickly fall into the "just evil" trope. For me the most logical expression of Chaos is the downfall of morality and the rule of the strong.

Freya does not see rape as a crime, and feels no guilt about what she does. I feel she would laugh at being called a monster, maybe even admit to being the worst beast of all: human.
What could hit her would be anything that makes her feel small and/or weak. But that is hard for a victim to do.

Years ago I imagined a brief conversation happeing between two characters and saved it for possible use later. For Clarity: The person speaking is Mara. Once a noblewoman turned sex-slave the awakening of her dormant psyker abilities made her more usefull to Lady Sokara and she rose up in the world. I imagined these words to be spoken after some taunt from Freya forgetting her station

„I have tolerated such comments for a long time, given our past”

“But now you begin to overstep your boundaries.”

“Once you could have me. Once you could hurt and rape and degrade me. And I confess that… at times…you left me wanting more.”

“But those times have long passed. I am no longer a slave to you, yet you are still only a glorified watch dog.”

“Make another such comment uninvited and we will move this discussion to my private torture chambers.”

After this she would be fuming. She wants to feel powerful and in control, but she knows she is in fact only a "glorified watch dog". She would hate being reminded of that so blatantly, especially from someone who was once lower than her. And not beeing able to strike back...
For a victim it would be hard to grasp that and use it I guess, and there she can retaliate.

We are getting off-topic again.
Would you be interested in me opening a topic "Character creation and critique"?
(If we don't have it already)

[Claire]

@AdmiralPiet Sure, create whatever topic you want.

[Claire]

A big thanks to @sinfulwords. I only just now noticed because of her that the recent hack apparently also got rid of my chapter 4 update. I have now exchanged the old outdated version of the chapter with the new edited version again.

Similar to the edits for chapters 1 to 3, chapter 4 should now read a lot smoother and eliminate a lot of errors. The word count was cut down from 4452 to 4235, mostly getting rid of repetitive or clunky phrasing. In terms of prose quality, it should be the biggest improvement since the chapter 1 update.

Sorry to @sinfulwords that she had to read the old version instead!

[sinfulwords]

A big thanks to @sinfulwords. I only just now noticed because of her that the recent hack apparently also got rid of my chapter 4 update. I have now exchanged the old outdated version of the chapter with the new edited version again.

Similar to the edits for chapters 1 to 3, chapter 4 should now read a lot smoother and eliminate a lot of errors. The word count was cut down from 4452 to 4235, mostly getting rid of repetitive or clunky phrasing. In terms of prose quality, it should be the biggest improvement since the chapter 1 update.

Sorry to @sinfulwords that she had to read the old version instead!

Oh it’s absolutely no worries! It’s been a great read so far! I didn’t even notice any awkward sentences or lack of syntax flow.

I was waiting until I finished reading the whole thing to tell you all my thoughts, but I can’t wait to tell you this one: when it was revealed why the story is called “record chaser” my mouth literally fell open my silly ass, for some reason, heard record and thought vinyl. And I was wondering how you were gonna incorporate a vinyl collector (record chaser) into a rape novella so when I learned that mark was trying to set a new record against his 16 year old self I was shoook 🫨

It’s been a wonderful read entirely and I have so many things to tell you about my reading experience as well as questions about your writing process ^.^ I’m just gonna finish the novella before presenting either or. Love your story

[Claire]

@sinfulwords Thanks! Always nice to hear that the title drop worked.

Comment however you want, whether it's all at once or step by step as @AdmiralPiet did as you keep reading. I myself took over a year to write this and my writing falls into three distinct phases (chapters 1 to 5, chapters 6 and 7, chapters 8 to 11). You could even see my current editing as a 4th phase. So feel free to ask away about how I wrote this, I'm happy to talk about that any time. Just let me know whether it's a particular chapter you're interested in, so that I know which writing phase I was in back then.

[Claire]

Chapter 5 was edited as well. With that, I've gone through all of my earliest writing from October 2024. For chapter 5, I cut down the word count from 7745 to 7111 words. And to honor my dear @AdmiralPiet I removed one instance of speed increase in the text.

The biggest change I made was cutting the "Mark's delusion vs. Claire's dissociation" sequence a little shorter by removing one step in the sequence. I think that improves the pacing.

Other than that, it's more of the same of what I did for the other chapters. Fix objective mistakes like typos, improve clunky phrasing, correct POV inconsistencies, reduce repetitive phrasing, split longer paragraphs into multiple shorter ones, etc.

Anyway, I'm very happy to now have fully revisited these five early chapters. They should now be more up to par with my later writing, regarding the quality of the prose at least. Further improvements would require more drastic rewrites.

[AdmiralPiet]

And to honor my dear @AdmiralPiet I removed one instance of speed increase in the text.

So we went down from "Ludicrous Speed" to just "Ridiculous Speed"?

Anyway, I'm very happy to now have fully revisited these five early chapters. They should now be more up to par with my later writing, regarding the quality of the prose at least. Further improvements would require more drastic rewrites.

So is project Edit done for now or are you planning on doing a lighter pass over the other chapters as well?

I would read it again, but I find it very tedious to read a story I have recently read, and where I know very closely what is happening.
Part of the reason it takes me so long to read the "Sorc" Edits.
But perhaps later.

[Claire]

And I edited chapter 6. The weakest passages of the chapter were probably in the opening, but once I got to the heart of the chapter, I think it held up well overall. In terms of pure word count, I reduced 3114 words to 2975 this time.

@AdmiralPiet I'll go through all chapters until the very end. I want this story to be in its best possible state because I don't want it to turn readers off from reading Divergent Limit. And don't worry, I don't expect you to read it a second time. Just thought I'd let you know that you had a small effect on the editing of chapter 5.

[sinfulwords]

@Claire

Wow. Just wow! I absolutely adore your novella. It was so fun to read. I had started it thinking it was going to be my ‘read at break times at work read’ but after the first chapter I could tell this was something special so I wanted to move it to a more prestigious slot in my reading schedule So, after I had finished my current ‘read before bedtime read’ YOUR book took that slot! Congratulation, please collect your trophy It’s very obvious how much time and care u put into it. Thanks so much for recommending it to me ^.^

It’s very impressive that this is your very first piece of fiction and I’m curious what inspired the idea in the first place

I’m also curious if the character of Claire is a self-insert? I obviously realize your handle is Claire as well, so, I’m curious if story-Claire was named after you or if your handle is named after her?

The writing is brilliant! Better than some published works I’ve read tbh. I loved the slow burn of it all, nothing felt rushed, every detail had its point. No sentence seemed wasted, from the setup of the rape itself, to the chilling yet nonchalant insanity showcased in Mark (all the aspects of psychology study), to the carefully constructed deconstruction of such a strong character, like Claire’s, will to fight. Everything was clear and elaborative, enhanced by obviously well-thought-out figurative language and striking dialogue that brought the characters to life….it was also so soooooo hot too

I loved both characters but because I’m such a depraved little deviant Mark was my favorite character to read. I’ve always been a sucker for a good villain, and you, my friend, wrote a spectacular villain! I loved how he had his little code of conduct his code was so important to him (cause I believe it shielded himself from what he truly is). The importance of his code was solidified in chapter ten when it ultimately transcended his ambition to exceed his own record. Which is quite significant cause the story is called Record Chaser which implies the importance of the record chasing, not to mention, you took the time to detail how much pain he was in while trying to beat said record: all the fatigue, muscle aches, and friction burns, etc.

idk if you like crime-dramas, but he kind of reminded me of Dexter from the show Dexter. The way he sort of accepts that he has “dark urges” but uses this “code” to try and justify the violence he inflicts on others, along with the delusion that somehow makes him better than other degenerates who practice in his “sport”. I loved the parts when he would become perturbed by Claire’s censure, feeling frustrated by his own guilt, cause I really believe he believed his code made him better than other rapists, so, when Claire would hold up this mirror that reflected the beast within, his carefully self-mandated ego didn’t quite know how to cope. I mean, it was often detailed that he didn’t often spend so much time with his victims, so, he wasn’t accustomed to seeing the effects of his cruelty, but that sort of implies he knew the effects were there. It just never stopped him from raping. Albeit, out of sight, out of mind is a very strong rope that binds the human psyche isn’t it? Mark discovered that FIRST hand

Claire was also a pleasure to read, in completely different ways than mark…obviously lol. She was a very likable character who you were naturally rooting for. Man I wanted her to get the upperhand somehow the whole time AND she DID every once in a while. Anytime her words got to Mark, I believe this was a victory for Claire. As the victim of someone who puts on a pseudo-friendly demeanour in the face of violence, to crack that veneer is something special. Like In Chapter ten, in Mark’s farewell section, he details everything Claire had said that bothered him. He wasn’t thinking how awesome the rape was, he wasn’t thinking about how he actually fulfilled his goal….he was dwelling on Claire’s scrutiny while he followed her home. That in itself is a victory for Claire imo

And it’s no surprise she had some victories in that regard, she’s written as a very intelligent woman. I’d bet she’s a DIABOLICAL chess player lol. In the beginning it was so tragic to read how she was trying to use her mightiest weapon, her mind, to get her out of that terrible situation. She learned a hard won lesson: logic and appeal doesn’t work well on crazy it was incredibly hard to read her character slowly start to realize she wasn’t going to be able to talk her way out it. The way you wrote her creeping desperation was really good, how it slowly sank in the closer it got to midnight until the levee broke and hysteria washed over. She was so logical and stoic when she had oodles of time before midnight that slowly devolved into chaos as the cinderella-hour approached. I thought that was super realistic. It’s so often that we humans can’t quite process terrible things when we know they’re about to happen or even right AFTER they’ve happened. Like that’s why we have that saying: “It hasn’t sank in yet,” cause it’s such a universal experience. Furthermore, you captured a true fighting spirit in her. She really maintained her tenacity for far longer than I would’ve ever been able in her situation. But that made it all the more tragic when she STOPPED fighting. The glazed look you described in her eyes, the whole ‘checked-out’ vibe that really pissed Mark off—I think you described it as ‘weirdly used to being raped’ or something to that effect in the begining of chapter nine. The way you waited until the near end of the story to make her shut down made that defeat hit all the more vigorously….although Claire is a villain in her own way too….cause she likes math…and math stands for Mental Abuse To Humans, so she’s not TOTALLY innocent, she enjoys the pain of others XD lol just a little joke. I honestly liked how you made her a math wizard. It gave her a unique flare.

Now I shall highlight particular things I liked in no particular order, as these are the things that stood out to me, and stayed with me over the time i was reading your novella.

It was such a great idea to open the story in an enigma, the fact that Claire had no idea where she was, it really set the story up for an exciting start. We the readers kind of already knew she was in hot water, of course, given the subject matter but I was invested on exactly how her grim situation was going to be revealed to her

I loved all the metaphors you used for Claire’s Vag: Love canal, Pleasure Cave (my personal fav), Fun hole, Passion mine (my second fav)

The very beginning of the rape scene was BRUTAL! The way her vagina was like a wall of cement that Mark had to chisel through. You REALLY wrote that well. I was cringing the whole time cause the writing was so visceral.

I loved how you captured her conscious efforts of dissociation at the beginning of the rape: Claire’s fixation on the ‘shaking’ ceiling coupled with the inability to block out the feeling of Mark thrusting. Very well executed

SPANKING!! God that scene was so awesome! I feel like such a twisted weirdo cause I liked that scene so much I did still feel absolutely AWFUL for Claire in chapter 8, tho, because how could Mark’s evil be so astute that he’d force the poor thing to ASK to be kissed?!?!?! Absolutely DEMONIC! I almost hate you for making her go through that….But i also love you for doing it too….why are non-con kinks so complicated

That evil was further enhanced when Mark MADE her WILLING open her legs for him. He’s just pure evil wrapped up in a casual nonthreatening-looking-guy package, isn’t he?

Further more in Chapter 8—CUM WATERFALL!!!!!! Daaaaaaaaamn shorty! Got me feeling all types of swollen with that chapter. The way she kept leaking cum and Mark kept shoving it back in—a whole new meaning to the word violation. Ws in the chat!

I think chapter 8 was my favorite

And now I must touch on the ending….Chapter 10…. POOR claire!!! The way you captured the essence of that ‘tired but wired’ feeling that comes with anxiety after trauma was insanely accurate. From the creeping thoughts of the trauma contaminating familiar spaces without warning, like the color of her pajamas or her creampi-plushie, to the random branches your brain tries to latch-on to, like her having to pee or grabbing an apple. The way you wrote that feeling of wishing your brain would shut down when it refuses to was a little too close to home but i applaud you for your skillset in that execution.

It’s not too often these non-con stories detail the aftermath of the rape, so I found it very refreshing and original that you embarkred to do so. And boy was it a tear-jerking experience. Cause all kinks and juicy-fun-arousal aside, this is a very serious subject matter and it’s good for people who enjoy these kinds of stories to step back and appreciate that once a while….if not consistently all the time

The last chapter was interesting….suffice it to say I liked the parts with Claire in them

Overall it was a very good story! I enjoyed it so much! Thank u so much for writing it and for recommending it to me ^.^ Kudos X 13….for every tally on Mark’s scoreboard ….but actually kudos times a million

[Claire]

@sinfulwords Thank you for the amazing comment, I love it! You made my day.

If you want to delve deeper into the Record Chaser universe, then Late Satisfaction is the next story to read. You'll meet Claire there again, albeit only briefly, and get to know Eugene in much more detail. The story is with ~30,000 words also a bit shorter than Record Chaser with ~46,000 words.

Claire's story continues in Divergent Limit. In chapters 1 and 2 you get to see what happened the night before Claire got abducted by Mark. I'm very happy that I finally got to write that. But note that Divergent Limit functions as a sequel to both Record Chaser and Late Satisfaction.

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But now to your comment. Thanks for the glowing review. You're making me blush.

It’s very impressive that this is your very first piece of fiction and I’m curious what inspired the idea in the first place

To be more precise: it was the first story I started writing. I wrote the first 5 chapters in quick succession in October 2024. Then I wrote like 5 to 6 short to medium length stories and started writing Late Satisfaction before I wrote chapters 6 and 7 in December 2024. And after gaining quite a bit more experience writing, I finally wrote chapters 8 to 11 from August 2025 to November 2025.

What inspired the idea? At the time I was reading stories on our predecessor forum RavishU and I just deeply wished to read a story that took the psychological toll on the victim seriously and that didn't portray the rapist as a caricature psychopath. I wanted a story that feels more real, so I ended up writing it myself. That was my original motivation. And to my own surprise, the story turned out to be fairly popular despite the slow pace and the stronger focus on realism and emotional depth over the usual tropes.

I’m also curious if the character of Claire is a self-insert? I obviously realize your handle is Claire as well, so, I’m curious if story-Claire was named after you or if your handle is named after her?

The answer is faily unspectacular I'm afraid. I registered on RavishU because I wanted to post chapter 1... and then I realized that I needed a user name. I didn't want to use any username I had used elsewhere because I wanted to keep my rape fantasy author profile separate from my normal internet presence, so my brain went "Well, name of your protagonist I guess?" and so I ended up with Claire. Very creative, I know.

I wouldn't see Claire as a self-insert. She's very different from myself in many aspects, but her experience as a woman in a male dominated field is something that's heavily influenced by my own experience.

The writing is brilliant! Better than some published works I’ve read tbh. I loved the slow burn of it all, nothing felt rushed, every detail had its point. No sentence seemed wasted, from the setup of the rape itself, to the chilling yet nonchalant insanity showcased in Mark (all the aspects of psychology study), to the carefully constructed deconstruction of such a strong character, like Claire’s, will to fight. Everything was clear and elaborative, enhanced by obviously well-thought-out figurative language and striking dialogue that brought the characters to life….it was also so soooooo hot too

Thanks! I'm especially happy to hear that you thought nothing felt wasted. Striking the right balance of how much to show of the actual abuse was one of the most difficult choices to make. I think the biggest mistake a writer can make is to show every single rape explicitly in a setup like this. I tried to show only as many rape scenes as I thought that they would be able to do something truly new psychologically and in terms of character development. I'm really, really happy to hear that you think I found the right balance and that the continued assaults never got boring.

idk if you like crime-dramas, but he kind of reminded me of Dexter from the show Dexter.

It's one of those shows I always wanted to take a look at but then lost interest when it ended and I just heard many people saying they didn't like the final season. But I know the basic premise of the show.

I think you could transfer that concept to a rape fantasy story. Have a rapist who feels a strong urge to rape and tries to justify himself by only raping truly awful women as a form of punishment. I could see that work as a story.

I mean, it was often detailed that he didn’t often spend so much time with his victims, so, he wasn’t accustomed to seeing the effects of his cruelty, but that sort of implies he knew the effects were there.

I think that's a well known effect in general. For example, it is often easier to drop a bomb from a plane or a drone than to actually shoot another human being in the face from point blank range. Distance numbs empathy even if we understand the effect completely on an intellectual level.

Claire was also a pleasure to read, in completely different ways than mark…obviously lol. She was a very likable character who you were naturally rooting for. Man I wanted her to get the upperhand somehow the whole time AND she DID every once in a while. Anytime her words got to Mark, I believe this was a victory for Claire. As the victim of someone who puts on a pseudo-friendly demeanour in the face of violence, to crack that veneer is something special. Like In Chapter ten, in Mark’s farewell section, he details everything Claire had said that bothered him. He wasn’t thinking how awesome the rape was, he wasn’t thinking about how he actually fulfilled his goal….he was dwelling on Claire’s scrutiny while he followed her home. That in itself is a victory for Claire imo

Yeah, that is the intended reading. Starting with chapter 6, the central conflict of the story is about self-perception. Can Claire maintain her sense of personhood throughout the abuse or will Mark define how she sees herself? Will Mark be able to maintain his mask or will it shatter? At the end of chapter 9, Claire wins the psychological battle. Her sense of self remains intact while Mark's mask breaks and his record becomes hollow even as he technically achieves his goal.

although Claire is a villain in her own way too….cause she likes math…and math stands for Mental Abuse To Humans, so she’s not TOTALLY innocent, she enjoys the pain of others XD lol just a little joke. I honestly liked how you made her a math wizard. It gave her a unique flare.

That makes really wonder what you will think of Divergent Limit chapter 2 if you ever read it. I love that chapter, but it delves deep into what you'd consider to be Claire's "villainy".

The very beginning of the rape scene was BRUTAL! The way her vagina was like a wall of cement that Mark had to chisel through. You REALLY wrote that well. I was cringing the whole time cause the writing was so visceral.

At the time, I had recently read an article about a woman with such a severe case of vaginismus that she could not even use tampons properly. And that made me wonder... wouldn't that make for a great obstacle for a rapist? (Yes, perfectly normal thoughts, I know... ) In our stories, we usually portray raping someone as easy. But I think I've read that in reality, about 50% of all rape attempts fail. Obviously, I have no idea how accurate that number actually is. But in line with my desire to lean more into realism, I thought it would be interesting to ask: "Okay, but what if penetration for once was not super easy? What if the virgin girl does not turn into a gushing fountain for once just because someone tickled her clit once?" That is where the idea came from.

Chisel is also a great metaphor here btw. I ultimately went with pickaxe, but chisel works too! Same idea.

I loved how you captured her conscious efforts of dissociation at the beginning of the rape: Claire’s fixation on the ‘shaking’ ceiling coupled with the inability to block out the feeling of Mark thrusting. Very well executed

Thanks, I love that scene. Gets to me every time I reread it...

SPANKING!! God that scene was so awesome! I feel like such a twisted weirdo cause I liked that scene so much I did still feel absolutely AWFUL for Claire in chapter 8, tho, because how could Mark’s evil be so astute that he’d force the poor thing to ASK to be kissed?!?!?! Absolutely DEMONIC! I almost hate you for making her go through that….But i also love you for doing it too….why are non-con kinks so complicated

I know what you mean. Might be the psychologically most cruel thing I've ever written. Hopefully, my parents never find out...

The way you wrote that feeling of wishing your brain would shut down when it refuses to was a little too close to home but i applaud you for your skillset in that execution.

Yeah, writing that made me anxious. I had to lie down and cry a little after I was done with that chapter... But while I was writing, I was internally screaming at Claire: "Please, girl, for the love of god, lie down and sleep!"

his is a very serious subject matter and it’s good for people who enjoy these kinds of stories to step back and appreciate that once a while….if not consistently all the time

I think it is important to not let yourself grow to numb to the actual horror. I believe it's fine to enjoy a story like this, whether it's just as a narrative and/or sexually, similar to how you can enjoy a story about war or heroic tales where the hero kills dozens of henchmen without remorse. But I think it's also important to always keep in mind how severe of a crime rape truly is. Because a community like ours will sadly also attract those who will downplay sexual violence. I think as a community, we have a responsibility to always keep that line in mind.

Overall it was a very good story! I enjoyed it so much! Thank u so much for writing it and for recommending it to me ^.^ Kudos X 13….for every tally on Mark’s scoreboard ….but actually kudos times a million

Thank you so so much for the amazing comment again. Only very few readers take the time to go into such detail and it means the world to me! I really hope you will give Late Satisfaction a chance as well. It is a very different beast from Record Chaser, but as a reader of RC you might enjoy the connections between the two stories. And I can promise you that the rapist, while a very different character from Mark, is also a very unique personality for our little niche. If you enjoyed Mark's eccentricities, maybe you will have fun with him too.

Wish I could give you more than 3 points for your feedback post, you deserve them.