Two Broken, One Whole - Kristen's Board Contest

[Colin Piper]

A nice tale of lovemaking through trauma.

I love them making love to each other in such wonderful deep detail

Well, yes the detail was good, but it's also an area that was overdone in parts, I felt. I mean there's lots of detail from beginning to end, but little proportion. I prefer a sense of ebb and flow - general description to get from A to B rather than explaining every single action as A, then B, then C, then D, then E... but use that detail for the more important parts. Long shot, medium shot, closeup, rather than closeup all the way, as it were.

But it still works. Well done.

[AdmiralPiet]

Strong entry. Nice to see the two again, and having them getting back on their feet.
The parents still being close minded I see.

Was a bit of a bummer to have another panic attack ruin their time together. But it shows how strong their bond is.
As @Claire said: That could strain their relationship, though I guess it is easier if both suffer from the same and know exactly how it is.