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Snow White - A ravished fairy tale - Femdom Fury
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This forum is for publishing, reading and discussing rape fantasy (noncon) stories and consensual erotic fiction. Before you post your first story, please take five minutes to read the Quick Guide to Posting Stories and the Tag Guidelines.
If you are looking for a particular story, the story index might be helpful. It lists all stories alphabetically on one page. Please rate and comment on the stories you've read, thank you!
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Length: Flash | Short | Medium | Long
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Re: Snow White - A ravished fairy tale - Femdom Fury
@LaLia told you this would be the outcome. This is a very deserved victory for an excellent story.
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Re: Snow White - A ravished fairy tale - Femdom Fury
Not a badly written story, and it has several pieces that work in its favour for me: Dark Queen, Anal, Futa dominatrix.
But at the same time there are a number of points that pull it down.
You describe Snow White as petite, naive and innocent, but even so her reactions to Ravenna where too weak. Barely any resistance to being bound, no trying to escape the whip or to wriggle out of her bonds. She just let it happen. Maybe lean a bit more into how she fears Ravenna and does not dare to fight back.
Also her dress: It felt like it was made of paper.
Maybe let Ravenna rip it off using magic if you do not want do describe a struggle, or maybe some minions? The dwarfs or magically animated suits of armor.
To keep her from wriggling away give her a choice maybe. Either take it, or be strung up by the wrists and take it like that.
The banana rape was too short, almost a throwaway line. It throws the pacing of course to have her do such a thing and not have Snow Whites reaction to it. Better to leave it out entirely. Let the anal rape be the first and have her offer up her virginity later on, when she is broken in?
Also the Banana seems out of place in the setting. Maybe let her have a dildo ready, glass, wood, metal. Or if you want a makeshift dildo: The whiphandle or a candle?
Speaking of candles: At first you describe a single large candle, later on several candles.
Snow Whites hands are bound behind her back? How can she then be on all fours?
Towards the end you start to paragrafs with Ravenna speeding up her movements
I know this sounds very negative, but it was overall not bad at all.
But for once I have some concrete points of criticism, not just a vague (and useless) "its not my style"
But at the same time there are a number of points that pull it down.
You describe Snow White as petite, naive and innocent, but even so her reactions to Ravenna where too weak. Barely any resistance to being bound, no trying to escape the whip or to wriggle out of her bonds. She just let it happen. Maybe lean a bit more into how she fears Ravenna and does not dare to fight back.
Also her dress: It felt like it was made of paper.
Maybe let Ravenna rip it off using magic if you do not want do describe a struggle, or maybe some minions? The dwarfs or magically animated suits of armor.
To keep her from wriggling away give her a choice maybe. Either take it, or be strung up by the wrists and take it like that.
The banana rape was too short, almost a throwaway line. It throws the pacing of course to have her do such a thing and not have Snow Whites reaction to it. Better to leave it out entirely. Let the anal rape be the first and have her offer up her virginity later on, when she is broken in?
Also the Banana seems out of place in the setting. Maybe let her have a dildo ready, glass, wood, metal. Or if you want a makeshift dildo: The whiphandle or a candle?
Speaking of candles: At first you describe a single large candle, later on several candles.
Snow Whites hands are bound behind her back? How can she then be on all fours?
Towards the end you start to paragrafs with Ravenna speeding up her movements
I know this sounds very negative, but it was overall not bad at all.
But for once I have some concrete points of criticism, not just a vague (and useless) "its not my style"