3 clients

[Claire]

Both Mark as well as the strike-through formatting feel familiar.

I'm curious. Why was it important to you to use Mark for this particular story? I like the general idea of the story. I think the number of stories we have on the board that use prostitutes as victims is rather low. That might genuinely be an interesting angle to take. What would being raped be like for a prostitute who usually feels in control during her job? I just wonder what Mark adds to this particular story compared to any random client who goes crazy?

I like the 3 client structure you're going for. Client number 2 was already a bit of a surprise. Chapter 2 is also more comfortable to read because of the formatting. Chapter 1 can steer a bit into wall of text territory occasionally.

[Labaal]

Both Mark as well as the strike-through formatting feel familiar.

I'm curious. Why was it important to you to use Mark for this particular story?

Why Mark (cause I really like the character)
Because he's excellent as the character to incite the incident also I plan to re-edit the first chapter in a way
Or work something out in the following chapter s to make him re-appear, being a bit pissed off for not being able to go one orgasm over his record and particularly triggered about the words "Time's up" which was what claire had said him before he could have his 14th orgasm

I think with any other crazy client the animal imagery(snapping turtle, mosquito,anteater,wolf,werwolf) would fall a bit flat . But I wanted to signify the erratic transformation from one predatory creature to another with Mark
since Mark is a pre-established character with a very particular "code" I was interested in seeing how he would violate it, who he would violate it on,and what would set him off to break his rules,incite the incident that would kick off the plot,also I wanted to play with the going over the time aspect, because of the safety net that would usually provide Sam in an uncomfortable situation and because my "mark" is the one immediately after the events of RC where he is still coping with Claire's words in a way I wanted him to be like a category 5 hurricane ,that would upend everything Sam was used to or knew about her circumstances


I hope that answers this question
I'll be VERY pleased to take more questions and feedback

I would also love to know how chapter 2 surprised you,what you found interesting and where you'd like to see it go(I have my own plans)

[Lucius]

1) spice

There is quite a lot. I'd like to note the coitus inter mammas ending in bukkake. Yeah, the story is hot.

2)story

So far it goes well, not sure where the plot leads Sam. The text really needs editing, it's hurricane-y in places.

3) characterization

I wanted to say Mark feels OOC, but then again he might well snap after the events of RC. Robert is believable, and Sam more so -- I like the portrayal of a disillusioned working girl. I have a weakness for stories involving prostitution.

[TromboneDalek]

Absolutely love the juxtaposition between client 1 and client 2. Intrigued to see what client 3 will bring!