The Love of My Chains

[VictimEyes]

ACKNOWLEDGEMENTS AND PROPS, @sinfulwords !!!!!!

I re-read the prologue followed by chapters 1 thru 5 back to back to back to back to back and then immediately read chapter 6. I feel even more strongly now that this story aspires to be a screenplay. I would go see this movie anytime.

THIS STORY PISSED IN MY MOUTH
JERKED OFF ALL OVER MY FACE
RAVAGED AND INSEMINATED EVERY ONE OF MY BODY'S ORIFICES
AND LEFT ME WITH NOTHING TO SAY OTHER THAN:
"Yes master, thank you master."

OUT -FUCKIN'- STANDING work !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[sinfulwords]

@Claire
Yuuuuusss!! Plot twist at the very end I actually dropped little clues about it throughout the story but they were INCREDIBLY subtle.

I just imagine Hollow and Patsy getting all quiet and communicating telepathically here: "Shit, this just got serious." - "Yeah, man, better be quiet. Should we stop the fucking, though?" - Hollow shrugs - "I don't know man. What's the protocol here?" - "Fuck do I know. Just keep going..."

LMAO love this Patsy/Hollow head canon

I knew it! I knew I had the correct read on him!

you nailed it!!! I suppose it’s the how that’s in question now as opposed to the “if”

Overall, a worthy final to this little saga. I wonder whether the epilogue will continue exactly here or jump ahead in time a little.

Thanks so much!!! The epilogue, like all the other chapters will continue right where the next one left off. think of it like the cool down stretches after a workout!

Thanks again for reading and engaging with my content I really appreciate it!

As for the rules, NO LIE, I was worried about this the entire time. I even reached out to Veela before I ever started posting the story (cause her handle has admin underneath it) and I asked her for clarification on what would constitute extreme violence. The answer I got was ultimately still a little vague so I decided to just shoot my shot and hope for the best I was just hoping that since the violence was more revenge oriented: a brutal character death as opposed to sexual gratification from the violence itself I’d have a good chance at the story not getting flagged…fingers crossed it gets to stay up

Holy shiiiiit! That other story that got the boot sounds BANANAS like not the nipple snack

[sinfulwords]

@Lucius

Neither whole nor alive.

Calliope might not be a prophetess but you certainly seem to have some prophet-like abilities

Wonderful, edge-of-the-seat continuation.

Thank you kind sir I’m so happy you enjoyed it and thanks again for reading and reviewing, I really appreciated the engagement

? I'd say Jax's end falls within the rules.

Omggggg that’s so relieving thank u for your kind verdict fam

I’ve actually never seen Mr.Peckinpah me thinks I’ll have to look into this film

Thanks again for sticking with the tale and beguiling me with ur comments

[sinfulwords]

@VictimEyes

ACKNOWLEDGEMENTS AND PROPS

oh my god thank u friend im so THRILLED you enjoyed the story so thoroughly!!!

I re-read the prologue followed by chapters 1 thru 5 back to back to back to back to back and then immediately read chapter 6. I feel even more strongly now that this story aspires to be a screenplay. I would go see this movie anytime.

ya know what? I feel it!!! Screenplay is a good way to describe my style. I very much paint a picture of what’s going on and what’s being said (and how) versus in depth analysis of characters or intricate underlying themes

THIS STORY PISSED IN MY MOUTH
JERKED OFF ALL OVER MY FACE
RAVAGED AND INSEMINATED EVERY ONE OF MY BODY'S ORIFICES
AND LEFT ME WITH NOTHING TO SAY OTHER THAN:
"Yes master, thank you master."

the perfect reaction the story wants to crawl inside you and live there forever

Thanks so much for reading and reviewing your particular brand of enthusiasm was super encouraging and I always looked forward to your quirky little quips whenever I’d update ^.^

Thanks a lot for all your comments

[TromboneDalek]

I’ve read this twice now because I wanted to read it again after reading the current comments! The first few paragraphs of the prologue drew me in and connected me to the slave (as that’s all they were at the time). Specifically up until “you’re taught that without that person you’re nothing.” After there it gets a bit dense with the world building and my brain started to drift away. The information about the Nesting Ground and Seed Place could be dropped in while discussing the slave brands. I enjoyed the section with the haves and have-nots. Oh, and since there are guests coming over that provides another opportunity to have other characters drop the lore of the world. Excited for chapter 2 and I’ll drop another comment as I continue!

[TromboneDalek]

Ahhhhhh I was wondering when Jax would get his dues and his crime would be revealed. Dude is a cocky overzealous idiot. Loved when the vibe of the room switched. @Claire and I had the same amused reaction to only the quiet moaning being heard when shit starts to go down. Interesting use of the slaves as canisters for cum to be deposited. I was so worried Sadie would cum without permission!

[sinfulwords]

@TromboneDalek
Oh wow a new commenter hello new commenter thanks so much for reading and taking the time to tell me some of your thoughts

Thank u for your insights into how the prologue worked/didn’t work for you. I appreciated you mixing your valid critiques with elements you DID enjoy I guess I wanted to paint a picture of the setting and got carried away, cause at the end of the day the story could’ve stood well on its own without it. C’est la vie

Ahhhhhh I was wondering when Jax would get his dues and his crime would be revealed. Dude is a cocky overzealous idiot.

this was EXACTLY how I wanted him to come off I’m PUMPED his character translated that way for u

Claire and I had the same amused reaction to only the quiet moaning being heard when shit starts to go down.

giving a WHOLE new meaning to the phrase awkward silence out here

I was so worried Sadie would cum without permission!

low key me too

I’m happy you ultimately liked the story! Thanks again for reading and throwing a rad-tad bit of engagement my way. I enjoyed reading your comments

[AdmiralPiet]

Oh that’s interesting u thought high society the vibe I was most inspired by would probably be the chaotic environment of The Parable of the Sower. I like mad max but it’s not my favorite franchise although I can understand why your brain went there…”My name is Max. My world is fire. And blood”

I don't know that reference.
Mad Max is also a broad statement if I think about it. In the first movie government still seemed to have a (slipping) grip on things, in two and three it had collapsed. In the last even more so.

There’s a few reasons as far as I’m concerned. One: master might be having a bad day and any small transgression could be considered insubordination. Two: Sadie came to him as a very young adult, still a teenager (19), and in my head she’d have bad days too, maybe catch a little attitude here and there cause you’ll come to see that her and Tyler share a more familiar relationship than one might expect from a master and slave. So with teenagers and young adults leniency can often come with pushing limits three: cumming without permission would be an unavoidable crime that carries lofty repercussions

Yeah, I figured he was the type of guy to fly of the ahndle on a bad day.
Giving the slave impossible tasks to then punish them for it: Can be top notch if done right.

I have now reached end of chapter 3.
This is a complicated one for me. I do like the style as I said before, and you have certain elements that I really like.
But some aesthtic choices like Sadies tattoos not so much.
Whith the characters I struggle a bit. Sadie is alright, the others I am a bit indifferent to. Not sure why.

And I am not getting the world as such. Warning: Nitpick ahead, don't take it too much to heart.

They were both slender but well endowed, their nipples clamped with clothes pins as pre-manufactured clamps were particularly hard to come by in our time.

I understood "pre-manufactured" as "dedicated (metal) nipple-clamps", because the clothespins would also be pre manufactured. Later that was clarified to indeed mean what I understood.
I can get behind some things being scarce in a distopian world, but I get mixed signals here. There seems to be a society there, a training facility for sex slaves, enough people to make a fortune on selling drugs, equipment to manufacture drugs, make moonshine, desalinate water and possibly to treat wastewater, a glass bulb on the drug pipe. But on the other hand even water is so scarce people can't wash, and even the rich and powerful can't afford a simple metal clamp?

Clamp coud also be made from copper or bronze if steel is still hard to come by. Actually: I would argue the glass bulb should be harder to produce than the clamp.

If you allow me a moment of real pedantry:
The clothespins do hint at a far higher level of industrialisation. If water is so scarce, who would wash and hang their clothes to dry? And if so: You can do that without clothespins as it was done for thousands of years, or people would make single piece wooden clothespins (wouldn't wood also be scarce if water is?...) In such a distopian world it is hard to imagine someone would manufacture clothespins with springs that are mainly for convenience sake.
A way around this (if you go with "metal and manufacturing power is too valuable to waste on metal nipple clamps"): Have Patsy use wooden stick clamps, that can be held together with leather or string.
Or let the clamps be wooden nippleclamps, because wood with a spring is still cheaper than metal with a spring)
Nitpick mode over

But I would really like to understand the world more.

Watersports: Some years ago that would have thrown me off quite a bit. Today it is still not my kink, but I can live with it. In the right scenario I might even use that myself as a means of humiliation.

As for ending of chapter three: Ignoring my comment on the economic viability of nipple clamps: I do love nipple clamps and look forward to see them in use in chapter 4.

[sinfulwords]

@AdmiralPiet

Hey again! Thanks for reading and taking the time to tell me some of your thoughts…no matter how pedantic some of them might be I appreciate the feedback fam

I don't know that reference.

Ah man if u haven’t read parable of the sower and its sequel parable of the talents I HIGHLY recommend. They HELLA good!

Yeah, I figured he was the type of guy to fly of the ahndle on a bad day.
Giving the slave impossible tasks to then punish them for it: Can be top notch if done right.

yeee he IS basically a meth head after all. They’re not really known for their emotional regulation …and myes, I agree, the concept CAN be quite alluring when done right

Whith the characters I struggle a bit. Sadie is alright, the others I am a bit indifferent to. Not sure why.

hey man if the characters ain’t doin it for u, they ain’t doin it for you I’m happy to hear u fuck with Sadie tho.…im getting the impression that the tenor of the story isn’t really your cup of tea but you have mentioned you enjoy my style of writing so maybe since Sadie’s the narrator (the vessel of my writing style) your brain tells u that u like her while the others are pieces of the premise that just don’t do anything for you. I’m just speculating for fun

As for the clamps: fair enough I made them clothes pins cause Patsy would have JUST picked them up from the pits and then went straight to Tyler’s. The clamps and plugs would be like decorations…like accessories that come with a Barbie and since the pits have a lot of slaves (i picture a Tender is The flesh human farm for sex slaves instead of human meat sort of deal) to put them all in metal ones would be fiscally irresponsible.

Watersports: Some years ago that would have thrown me off quite a bit. Today it is still not my kink, but I can live with it. In the right scenario I might even use that myself as a means of humiliation.

personally I enjoy it SOLELY because of the humiliation and degradation aspects It’s so gooood in that regard to me

As for ending of chapter three: Ignoring my comment on the economic viability of nipple clamps: I do love nipple clamps and look forward to see them in use in

I’m glad you’re looking forward to chapter 4 hopefully u continue to find bits and bobs that catch your interest

Thanks again for reading!!

[RapeU]

Now that I see the near complete picture of the story, I think the exposition at the beginning was necessary. Some stories call for expositions to be stitched together along with the plot. Other stories like this one require background knowledge beforehand. I think the way it was done here was totally fine and worked for this story. The Lord of the Rings couldn't start with Bilbo giving Frodo the ring without telling us what a Hobbit was first or what location they were in.

I've finally gotten a chance to read the whole thing in one sitting and this story is a masterpiece of excellence. The banter between the characters is crude, sort of like locker room talk among athletes, and completely hilarious. You manage to target multiple kinks in just the right way without the pacing dragging or going too fast. Chapter 3 is one I'll probably keep going back to because cunnilingus is one of my spots along with breast abuse and orgasm denial.

And yeah, there's no issue rule wise with Jax's dick getting cut off. It wasn't described in extreme detail and while someone *could* get sexual gratification from that part of the scene, it isn't written with that intent in mind.