Sorceresses Surprise - Gang Rape Galore

[Vela Nanashi]

Good comment and valid critique

One of my flaws is that I have weird non standard language, also although english is the better language for me, it is also my second one. I always write in a flow state, I have to capture what I sense in my mind, it is not really a carefully thought out or constructed thing, and I never edit as that murders the story for me, but I do spell check while I write, but that is all. I am sure it is not to everyone's taste or many even, just a few perhaps Also in the past I did not even use punctuation, it does not come natural to me, but I try to put some punctuation in these days in sensible places

As for what that snippet said, let me break it down.

I do not remember exactly everything, but I assume he had his fingers in her pussy before rubbing her face with that wetness.

My elves have very sensitive ears, there are massages that give them pleasure, calm or other things and even massages that will bind them to the person doing the massage, a love slave.

He is behind her, and his cock slides down her back, between her butt cheeks and then between her legs, but not into her but past to in front of her, and he lifts her with his huge cock. She ends up putting the weight of her body on his cock with her pussy.

She is slipping and sliding on him so I use slip many times I don't bother finding a thesaurus word to replace every occurrence, and as I said I record what I see as best I can.

The mindflayer makes them into love slaves using his psionic powers, he can edit memories, write new ones, rip them out, they are barely aware most of the time of who they were, just when he shows them. He enjoys making them aware from time to time of what they have lost, and what he has made them into, but most of the time they are what he made them into, not what they were.

The last part was not at all planned, it was just something I saw and wrote down, I do not plan anything in my stories, or very little, perhaps I see some sparks out there in the dark, and I only really know what they are when I get to them, if I do, and often I am not taken along a path I expected, but rather to some completely different place

I am not sure how common it is for people to write the way I do though probably not very common.

Some people can outline a plan they want to follow and then actually write a story that way, any time I outline a path I am utterly unable to write the story after, it is utterly and completely slain, dead, rotting before me.

Anyway thank you for your comment

[AdmiralPiet]

Good comment and valid critique

One of my flaws is that I have weird non standard language, also although english is the better language for me, it is also my second one. I always write in a flow state, I have to capture what I sense in my mind, it is not really a carefully thought out or constructed thing, and I never edit as that murders the story for me, but I do spell check while I write, but that is all. I am sure it is not to everyone's taste or many even, just a few perhaps Also in the past I did not even use punctuation, it does not come natural to me, but I try to put some punctuation in these days in sensible places

Ok. That is interesting, but at the same time a bit sad, because that makes it harder for me to enjoy the story.
I will read into your other entries though.

As for what that snippet said, let me break it down.

I do not remember exactly everything, but I assume he had his fingers in her pussy before rubbing her face with that wetness.

My elves have very sensitive ears, there are massages that give them pleasure, calm or other things and even massages that will bind them to the person doing the massage, a love slave.

That part was clear

He is behind her, and his cock slides down her back, between her butt cheeks and then between her legs, but not into her but past to in front of her, and he lifts her with his huge cock. She ends up putting the weight of her body on his cock with her pussy.

I assumed he was behind her and she kind riding his cock.
What threw me off was the sliding between breasts. Is the Orc cock that huge?

She is slipping and sliding on him so I use slip many times I don't bother finding a thesaurus word to replace every occurrence, and as I said I record what I see as best I can.

The last part was not at all planned, it was just something I saw and wrote down, I do not plan anything in my stories, or very little, perhaps I see some sparks out there in the dark, and I only really know what they are when I get to them, if I do, and often I am not taken along a path I expected, but rather to some completely different place

I am not sure how common it is for people to write the way I do though probably not very common.

Some people can outline a plan they want to follow and then actually write a story that way, any time I outline a path I am utterly unable to write the story after, it is utterly and completely slain, dead, rotting before me.

Then you are the very opposite of me.
I plan perhaps too much, at times I plan and plan without ever creating the thing I planned.

I worked on a snippet not too long ago, and wanted a woman wearing a big pelt mantle.
The story is set in south america. So I was researching the weather in certain areas to find a city where it would be feasible for her to wear such a mantle.

That is perhaps a bit too much thought for a porn story, but improper worldbuilding can at times sour a story for me.

[Vela Nanashi]

Yes some orc cocks are that big and he did that to intimidate her a bit, as she knows even with the ancient protective ritual magic all elves has that will be intense unless he is gentle and orcs are not usually gentle.

As for a consistent world, I do have that, I may not always capture that clearly but my fantasy worlds are places I visit in the dreaming, and can see inside my head when awake. I partially live there you could say