the Highlanders

[Blaster]

Very well written and smooth moving story. Could have gone into the details of the rapes a little more. The final scene was superb. By the way, how large is the unit they entertain at the end ? A military unit capturing a girl's school has been a fantasy of mine, but no talent for writing.

[Shocker]

Very well written and smooth moving story. Could have gone into the details of the rapes a little more. The final scene was superb. By the way, how large is the unit they entertain at the end ? A military unit capturing a girl's school has been a fantasy of mine, but no talent for writing.

As a rule of thumb a company is about 100 soldiers. A regiment would be 8 to 10 companies.

You might just try writing down your fantasies, believe me I didn’t think I had any talent for writing either.

[Claire]

And here I wondered for a second if you wrote Highlander fanfiction. Now that I think about it, doesn't the movie say that the creepy, evil immortal raped the highlander's wife after he killed Sean Connery? Oh well, I'm sure somebody already wrote fanfiction about that...

I liked the story. Especially the inclusion of the headmistress gave the story a unique touch that made it stand out from other stories for me. I think you captured the ugliness of war here very nicely.

A minor thing that made me wonder whether this is a typo or not: The very first sentence slips into present tense, saying "but appears to be short" instead of "but appeared to be short". I found that odd when the story otherwise seems to depict the present moment in past tense.

Also, I'm surprised by not seeing @Lucius anywhere in this thread. This reads like a story he might like.

[Shocker]

And here I wondered for a second if you wrote Highlander fanfiction. Now that I think about it, doesn't the movie say that the creepy, evil immortal raped the highlander's wife after he killed Sean Connery? Oh well, I'm sure somebody already wrote fanfiction about that...

I liked the story. Especially the inclusion of the headmistress gave the story a unique touch that made it stand out from other stories for me. I think you captured the ugliness of war here very nicely.

A minor thing that made me wonder whether this is a typo or not: The very first sentence slips into present tense, saying "but appears to be short" instead of "but appeared to be short". I found that odd when the story otherwise seems to depict the present moment in past tense.

Also, I'm surprised by not seeing @Lucius anywhere in this thread. This reads like a story he might like.

Let’s say I was deliberately playful with the title, allowing people to come to any conclusion what the story would be about that they wanted. I have indeed played with the concept of a story set in the universe of the immortals, there is a sheer endless amount of nasty one could do to a captured immortal. The show clearly established some lovely female characters. It would have been getting far too close to snuff for my liking, but yes the concept was intriguing.

The typo is the most likely case, I was finishing the story under time pressure, only getting the concept together less than 24h before deadline. But when I had the idea about the headmistress, trying to be protective, things clicked into place.

[Lucius]

Also, I'm surprised by not seeing @Lucius anywhere in this thread. This reads like a story he might like.

And who's that, just a migratory duck?

[Claire]

Also, I'm surprised by not seeing @Lucius anywhere in this thread. This reads like a story he might like.

And who's that, just a migratory duck?

Lol, I scrolled just by you. Still not used to seeing you in red. My bad!

[AdmiralPiet]

Lol, I scrolled just by you. Still not used to seeing you in red. My bad!

At least to people with a red-green-blindness he stayed the same

[Blaster]

Superb concept and execution ! An army unit taking over a girl's school is a favorite fantasy of mine. I understand the deadline, but a quick physical description of the rest of the girls would have given the imagination a starting point. The intended pregnancy thought was also a plus, not mentioned in other stories I've read. How many men in the final formation ? I'm trying to calculate a men:woman ratio.

[Shocker]

Superb concept and execution ! An army unit taking over a girl's school is a favorite fantasy of mine. I understand the deadline, but a quick physical description of the rest of the girls would have given the imagination a starting point. The intended pregnancy thought was also a plus, not mentioned in other stories I've read. How many men in the final formation ? I'm trying to calculate a men:woman ratio.

I have great confidence that you can populate the remaining women, in you minds eyes with absolutely gorgeous women. There are typically 8 to 10 companies forming a regiment, with a company about 100 men. So it's safe to assume, those English ladies are truly fucked.

[HistBuff]

so that the real experts in that genre Histbuff and Lucius don't scowl to much at me.

Thanks for calling me an expert, but I don't scowl at anybody anymore, maybe I've done that in the past, "back when I was young", but not so now after understanding that everybody here invests time and effort in their stories. My goal isn't accuracy anyway; I will write a story that gets me horny and that's it. And like all of us I happen to have rape fantasies!

The set-up of a college for young women is a great one. Using highlander troops is very à propos given your avatar picturing the most famous (and manliest) Scottish actor ever! This avatar was actually the very first appearance of James Bond, at the casino in Dr. No, with the very first Bond girl, a sultry brunette about 30* years old. I was 11 when I saw Dr. No for the first time and I was struck by Sean's on-screen presence and effortless glamour and maturity; and a movie featuring a 1957 Chevy Bel-Air convertible in a car chase scene is bound to remain a classic.

* Eunice Gayson (1928-2018), the actress who portrayed Sylvia Trench, was actually 34 then, so James Bond's very first seducing was a woman two years his senior! I just looked this one up