The Most Delectable Game

[ShibbolethParty]

Thank you so much for the kind words, and I'm glad you enjoyed the story so much!

The contrast at the beginning: the opening words (too non-con for literotica?!) which were very promising.

That's not actually too hard. Beyond some pretty standard restrictions (no underage, bestiality, snuff or permanent injury, etc.), Literotica bans "Ravishment/non-consent fantasies in which the 'victim' receives no thrill or enjoyment from the acts." Pretty sure that's the one I ran afoul of here. My first published story was comparable to this one in sexual content: short, episodic gangrape scenes strung together after a long lead-in. But I think they let it through because I let one of the women have an orgasm! (My mistake, obviously.)

You can get pretty dang cruel within those confines, though. Some of the stories by mind control author archerstories for instance, like "Taking Them With Me."

I would have loved to see these scenes described in more detail, but actually, it fits the story better as it is.

Haha, glad you think so. It's really hard for me to bring myself to write decent-length sex scenes... so instead I only write stories where less detailed ones will fit well.

Unfortunately, it seems to be finished. Okay it really is coherent as it is. But what a pity! There would be so many more possibilities. I have countless ideas.

For sure! I don't plan on returning to this setting myself, but you're right that there are plenty of angles.

I can see a story right now where someone privately owns a house and sets up an illicit time travel sphere just big enough to encompass a bed where the victim used to sleep by themselves. (Given the established time travel mechanics, I assume a smaller volume would take significantly less energy to operate.) Then you could kidnap a copy of that person more or less nightly - you could even vary how old they were, within the years that they used to sleep in that exact spot.

Given how disposable the victim would be in that scenario, though, the story leads in some obvious directions that I probably don't have the stomach to write myself!

[Claire]

Very interesting concept. Reminds me of Westworld actually, but instead of androids we have alternate versions of real people that are treated as non-human due to being from a disconnected timeline, like that makes them less real. Even the people returning to the same moment in time over and over again reminds me how the androids are stuck in a loop that the guests of the park interfere with every time in a different way.

I wish we would have gotten a bit more out of Calvin though. I would have probably gone more into how miserable he feels after the breakup and how all that pent up frustration turns into bliss as he finally rapes that girl that his father chose him. Personally, I find his transition from being passive and reluctant to no fucks given a bit rushed.

[ShibbolethParty]

I wish we would have gotten a bit more out of Calvin though. I would have probably gone more into how miserable he feels after the breakup and how all that pent up frustration turns into bliss as he finally rapes that girl that his father chose him. Personally, I find his transition from being passive and reluctant to no fucks given a bit rushed.

Absolutely fair criticism. The story could have used beta reading and iteration, but at the time I was doing neither. Thanks for the thoughtful response!