Fugitives - Gang rape galore

[chloevee]

Great story. Nice job using "two out of three" twice.

You do a great job of show-don't-tell--you make the environment real with sights, sounds and feelings.

I'm not sure if it was intentional, but it seemed uncertain if they would have raped her had they not discovered that she was a cop. (Aside from knowing the story prompt and whatnot. And I don't recall if we know that Eddie was in prison for serial rape at that point?) Either way, I liked the ambiguity at the beginning. In most of the noncon stories I've read (mine included) when the rapist(s) are introduced it is obvious what they intend from the start. So I liked that the eventuality of her rape was developed in the story rather than assumed from the get-go.

I liked Sophie's character a lot and found her behavior both realistic and consistent with her personality. She's defiant and stoic and when she screams or sobs, it means something.

I agree with @Lucius -- the parody of Miranda rights was nicely done. I didn't find it cheesy. Or rather, if it was a little on-the-nose, it made sense as something the character would say.

Pretty sure this is the hottest story (to me) that I've read on RA.

A few of my favorite parts:

Under normal circumstances chances would have been high, that she would have heard the metallic scratches at the backdoor, the light squeaking of the hinges of her screen door. She might have heard the tapping sounds of heavy boots, trying to tread lightly.

Sophia couldn’t see what was happening, but she felt Folsom moving beside her, the sound of heavy denim dropping to the floor.

The wailing Sophia felt him hooking his feet under hers, and was suddenly flipped around, without the cock in her ass being dislodged, her own weight drove her even deeper onto it if that was even possible. The bastard underneath her, used the leverage of his legs to spread her own, causing her ass to tighten even more and her pussy to open.

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A few (I assume) typos:

TSophia barely made it from her bathroom...

(From the preview.)

“Somehow I get the feeling we are in Kentucky no more.”

"ain't in Kentucky"?

“Good that will keep Kentucky’s finest of our backs...

"off our backs"?

His eyes were resting on Sophia’s legs were the gray fabric...

"where"?

Reaching for on of her hands and forcing them behind her back. ..

"one"?

Yet she had stopped to scream...

"stopped screaming"?

[Nickamano]

This is great! Another example of a powerful woman being stripped of her power. I particularly enjoyed the reveal that she was a police officer - I was thinking nurse or something.
The threats and emotional manipulations were all great, the fact that she had been living and breathing the three escapee's from the last 24 hours, worrying about the local populace with the knowledge of who these men were and what their rap-sheets would have revealed about them.

It might have been even more fun to have them already in the house and she is so exhausted tat the doesn't notice the tell tale signs and goes to bed...

Other than a few spelling errors, and that I would have liked a little more explanation of what was done to her over those hours, I can think of nothing to criticise at all.
Oh, there was one thing - after she had the truncheon pushed inside her and then is forced down onto her knees... I had trouble thinking about how that would work, depending on the length of the nightstick, maybe a few words of clarification would have, polished hard wood floors (could help with its slipperiness, rather then her making adjustments to her position to keep it lodged in place), kneeling up rather than kneeling down (one puts you in an 'upright' position from the knees up, the latter is more like legs bent double, ass to your heels) ...I know, I'm getting pedantic... sigh...

Great writing, very fun to read. Thank you for adding to the contest.

[Shocker]

WOW!
The best shocker I've read so far. At least for me, almost everything is just right. And what I liked best was the description of Sophia being double penetrated. The comparison with the saw is really apt!
I also don't mind that the ending is too rushed and brief. The refugees weren't the main characters of the story for me, so why bother describing whether they regretted their actions (which they certainly didn't anyway) or whether it would have been a more just punishment to have them put back in prison?
No, for me, the story is fine as it is written. And also my clear favorite for the competition.

P.S.
I devoured the story on my smartphone early this morning. It's not as convenient as on a laptop, but for me, it has the advantage that Google translates it immediately into German. And before I wrote this, I read the story again, practically word for word. And was even more excited than the first time

Thank you for the very kind words, I’m close to blushing. I completely agree with you about the importance of the convicts, they were merely a tool to wreak misery.

[Shocker]

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I'm not sure if it was intentional, but it seemed uncertain if they would have raped her had they not discovered that she was a cop. (Aside from knowing the story prompt and whatnot. And I don't recall if we know that Eddie was in prison for serial rape at that point?) Either way, I liked the ambiguity at the beginning. In most of the noncon stories I've read (mine included) when the rapist(s) are introduced it is obvious what they intend from the start. So I liked that the eventuality of her rape was developed in the story rather than assumed from the get-go.

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I honestly don't know, three desperate, escape convicts coming onto a defenseless woman. I think she had very little chance of not being ravished. But her being a cop certainly added to the ferocity. If she hadn't been a cop, easily missed during the search for the convicts. They might have holed up at her place and make her suffer much longer. It would have been an entirely different story, but I would have enjoyed it as well.

Butch Cassidy was the convicted rapist (wrongly in his mind)
Eddie Folsom was a get away driver for bank robbery
Lucas Jackson, I had forgotten to add the rap sheet, but Murder was on my mind.

[Vela Nanashi]

Teaser contains TSophia I assume the T is not meant to be there.

Though yes sleep important bad timing to be that tired though.

Got swept up reading her scary situation, clever integration of 2 out of 3.

press a knee into her back => pressed maybe?

on of her hands => one , them implies more than one hand, I know what you mean though

escape with hands cuffed behind your back, yeah... optimistic, if you succeed on stealth maybe, but running fast in that state is going to result in falling on your face, still I get the impulse

yeah death is much more final

weird choice, if you are fed up fucking assholes in prison and you have a pussy there, seems at least one of his fellow prison mates agrees with me

oh yeah that will be rough on her, without ring gag probably bad idea to make her do oral yeah

yeah... good that she realized that it was better to submit than be tortured worse than they ended up doing, though that was horrifying enough for her.

two out of three ain't bad twice, and yeah the men deserved that

not really a story I enjoy, so I won't complain about it being too short or not from first person, though I think that would have been more intense if we were seeing it from her point of view, then again maybe others would have enjoyed it more from their points of view.

[peterfrisk]

Really liked it. Stories involving home invasions are not uncommon and can become quite repetitive but yours is different in a good way. Liked the fact that they used her “work tools” on her.

The depicted scenes are just the way I like them and I hold this story as one of my favorites to win.

Good job!

[Shocker]

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not really a story I enjoy, so I won't complain about it being too short or not from first person, though I think that would have been more intense if we were seeing it from her point of view, then again maybe others would have enjoyed it more from their points of view.

Thank you for your feedback, I appreciate you taking the time for a story that didn’t resonate with you.
I’ll fix the typos after the contest, improving a story while it is in competition feels wrong to me.

Concerning first person out of Sophia’s view, that’s not something I can write. Any first person story I’ll write will have a male POV, not good enough of a writer to make the other fantasy work for me.

[Shocker]

Really liked it. Stories involving home invasions are not uncommon and can become quite repetitive but yours is different in a good way. Liked the fact that they used her “work tools” on her.

The depicted scenes are just the way I like them and I hold this story as one of my favorites to win.

Good job!

Thank you for the kind feedback, reaching a victim where she feels safe always adds extra spice. The beauty of authority figures is that the falling height to victim is so much greater. It doesn’t matter if it’s cops, officers, judges, politicians or millionaires if they feel untouchable, every touch counts double.

[LaLia]

Strong...really great

Right from the start, the men's conversations gripped me, and the reading of their rights was especially great. In general, the conversations run very well throughout the story, and the plot itself is sometimes rather subtle, yet very clear. Firstly, it's definitely a favorite to win and the better female cop story so far.

One small detail: 25-year prison sentence for 15 counts of rape!? 15 counts would be more in the US, wouldn't it? The death penalty and something like that should be the punishment.

[Shocker]

Strong...really great

Right from the start, the men's conversations gripped me, and the reading of their rights was especially great. In general, the conversations run very well throughout the story, and the plot itself is sometimes rather subtle, yet very clear. Firstly, it's definitely a favorite to win and the better female cop story so far.

One small detail: 25-year prison sentence for 15 counts of rape!? 15 counts would be more in the US, wouldn't it? The death penalty and something like that should be the punishment.

The justice system in the US is rather weird in its application and consistency when it comes to sentencing, but in hindsight I have to say you are correct. 25 years for a black serial rapist is to low. Kentucky does have the capital punishment, but has not executed any prisoners since 2008 and only 3 since 1976. All of the murderers. But a lifelong sentence, ought to have been more likely.

Glad you liked what you read, but as you can see we had some similar ideas, and I would not have trusted myself, that those were actually mine if I had read your story first.