Sorceresses Surprise - Gang Rape Galore

[Blue]

Interesting story, especially since I'm a self-proclaimed fan of fantasy stories. Elves and orcs have always fascinated me. Even though the books I've read so far have tended to have different content

[Vela Nanashi]

@Blue I am glad you found my story interesting

I often have elves, and fairly often orcs in my stories and they are mostly fantasy

Though yes the source books don't usually directly spell out sex between elves and orcs that often, but there are a lot of erotic stories out there that have that.

[chloevee]

I'm so impressed with the scifi elements and new mechanics you came up with and how you incorporated them into the story. I like you use the rings and portals to play with physics and introduce new and interesting positions. I often find mind control and compulsion boring, but the way the mindflayer uses it strategically, not just to make them mindless and obedient, but to make sure they know what is happening as they are made to do things they would never want to do adds a whole new level to the violation.

[Vela Nanashi]

@chloevee

I love my portals and other fun toys and crazy levels of magic I am glad you found them fun

Yeah there is this spell in some books of dnd called mind rape (level 9 spell, allows reading the mind and rewriting every memory and obviously implanting memories from others too), and I think that is a very accurate description of what the mind flayer did to them.

I can see what you mean with normal mind control or compulsion, though I think those too can be hot, seeing yourself do something you don't want, being helpless to stop that. Or as the spell ends you understand what you did, and yeah... not fun times.

[RapeU]

1) What did I immediately feel after reading this
2) What I love about what I read
3) What would I change in the story to make it perfect (for me)
4) Did I get off on this and why

1) Pretty much the same thing I feel after all your stories. There are some confusing elements in there that are hard for me to imagine (like the portals,) and requires me to hyperfocus on every detail to the point that I need to pause and reread parts of the story a few times.

2) I love the talent of your freewriting. You do an excellent job at placing your characters in perilous situations and detailing their abuse. I know you despise editing with a passion, but I feel like if you took the time to edit what you freewrite you could become a legendary author. You can train yourself to retain the emotions and feeling of the story while you edit. It's difficult to do, but it is possible.

3) Essentially for me to consider it a perfect story would be to make it only elves and humans, or something pretty close to humanoid. Other creatures just don't do it for me, but I can see people being into that kind of thing enjoying this story.

4) No because of different preferences. I'm just not into orcs or mindflayers (I had to look that one up.) I can see people who enjoy that area getting off to this.

[Vela Nanashi]

1) Yeah I am utterly unable to restrict myself to just normal boring reality, I write to escape it and the suffering I endure. I am glad that you try to figure out my crazy stuff, and I am sorry I fail to make it easier to understand. I think sometimes for the portals it is perhaps easier to just focus on the end result than the details, even if I describe details a lot. Like... If I say they end up in a 69 with themselves, with butt/pussy above their face, I mean it mostly in that the portal allows that to happen, the description of 69 means you can visualize it from just that, forget the details, also it allows that position that even a good contortionist can't make happen, removing that fold that would have to happen in belly area for that. If I say they have a long tongue and they push can slip that out into their pussy and lick a cock there or even pleasure themselves you can just I think visualize that aspect. I am not sure if any of this helps you though, and I just said these things to try to help you choose what details you want to absorb, and I will try to see if I can arrange information better to give that visual representation up front, and maybe use something like:

She sticks her long tongue out into her pussy

she is an elf and most elves have a much longer tongue than humans and it is not as restricted in their bodies, she sticks her tongue through a portal beneath her bottom front teeth that connects to a portal in her pussy next to her cervix

and licks his cock as he is about to bottom out in her pussy and he moans in surprise feeling her tongue inside her pussy, as he just felt it in their kiss a moment ago, he pushes his cock fully balls deep and she continues licking him and moans, and he kisses her, just feeling her tongue laying flat at the bottom of her mouth.

Not sure if that is better?

2) I have been thinking that maybe I should try to make a script that can process my text for me, finding larger blocks of text and telling me "hey this one could use a double enter" I could maybe do that much, or maybe allow the script to single enter after each period I put in, but I will not edit my old texts, I have tried that many a time, and every time I got depressed and stopped writing for months, because that story was utterly ruined for me, others may have liked it more, but for me it was dead, just as bad as if someone had run in there with a raiding party of evil characters and slowly tortured all the characters to death in the most gruesome way you can imagine, then burnt that gorgeous fantasy world to ashes. Ok so maybe a bit dramatic, I still have the original story since I am not a moron/idiot, but I have learned to give up on the idea that I can edit a story to make it perfect, best I can do is write the story as it happens in my head capturing as many details as I can, and also try to spell check real quick if I see something get red underlined that is not a name, but I already lose so much of what I see as it moves on in real time, and I am not that fast of a writer.

I have also been thinking about doing a different format for my writing, that makes at least some things much clearer and maybe saves some typing too and maybe can be combined to make each character have a first person point of view, if I make the format strict enough I could even pull out single person narratives from it.

Character: "speak" 'think or telepathy' observing what they do and what is happening around them.

Bob: I grab her hips and rub my cock over her pussy lips hands free and after a few failed attempts I manage to shove it into her "dang your pussy is tight!" I slap her ass and think 'I am so happy I live near that elven town, every year at least one flowering elf comes down the road to my tavern and fucks everything with a cock and a pulse. Me first to get food and drink as payment and a room, I am going to make this blonde goddess work harder though, pussy, ass and oral and going to test her limits, humiliate her as she deserves too.' her cunt milks my cock eagerly and I groan.

Blondie: 'I don't really like the name Blondie, but it was what Bob called me and I need a name that is not my full long elven name that humans can't even pronounce at knife point, so I will use this one, I think he refers to my golden hair' I feel a little bit weird about taking a human cock, but I do like that humans are all so huge, he fills me out so much and I moan for him, I blush though as I feel all the other patrons watching me naked on the stage getting fucked, but it is hot too. I moan "fuck me harder please master" 'he is not my master, but I know many men love being called that, at least that is what my big sis told me" I feel his cock getting harder in my pussy and jumps after I call him master.

still a work in progress that formatting though, more thinking needed...

3) I understand that, you can't place yourself in an orc as easily as in a human male, since you don't have that particular weird thing I have where I hate putting myself in a human in a role play or story, as I am one in real life and that is quite enough human to last me a life time... Still I will try to do some more humans from time to time. I usually like to have many different species/races involved, I just could not figure out why a human male would be safe in the underworld where blue orcs trade, given they love eating elves, humans, green and red orcs sometimes, gnomes also delicious, especially the farming gnomes who love to cook food, the techno gnomes not as much...

4) Noted Thank you for reading and commenting, I hope this long comment on your comment gives you a little more insight into me, I am sure other authors are a whole lot better for you than me and I hope you enjoy their earth real world centric stories and give them as good comments or better (since let's face it when we read a story that truly captures what we want and love we will write better comments in some ways, unless we become too drawn in and forget to comment) than you have me

[Shocker]

Vela this was a beautifully immersive story with dare I say it colorful cast. You strew in enough DnD references, that I was wondering if your story would end up with something like
“Ruby please throw me a constitution check”

I thoroughly enjoyed your story, as it is.

[Vela Nanashi]

Lol yeah in some role play groups using the erotica /porn books for various editions of dnd a constitution chack would be there lol and a pregnancy check. Among other rolls like roll to see if you make her orgasm. But thos is just inspired by various fantasy settings but if my own version with many additions and twists and turns

[Shocker]

@Vela Nanashi it’s just that this would have worked as well as her storytelling in roleplay as it does as a straight fantasy story. It was very well done.

[Vela Nanashi]

Yeah:) to me there is no difference between writing and role play, except the latter is unpredictable as it involves at least one more person, but can also be more fun when it is good collaborative storytelling