I can easily see the story going the way you described it, just not sure I could have written that in the alotted number of words. The way I approach stories, and this might be a preference thing, is that about the first third of a story is doing the heavy lifting in setting the scene. Yes I could have started with the “rape” but it would have required a lot of description to describe who is involved and what is happening. Also the task was to write something that would allow readers to actually identify one of the characters, so I had to put all my clues into that part as well.praetor3d wrote: Wed Apr 23, 2025 3:28 am I did not expect this story to go the way it did, so it was a pleasant surprise to read! Mostly because the NC tag seems to apply more to both the male actor and director, rather than the actress (which was what I was anticipating).
Just thinking aloud, if you don't mind, but as I finished reading, I was thinking what if this story started with a detailed description of the gang rape scene, then as the story unfolds, it turns out that it's actually just effective acting all along, and the original story then backtracks to narrate how that scene came to be. It would have totally thrown me into a twisted entertaining loop, or perhaps that's too confusing?
If I had we written this for a visual medium, the rape scene would have been the opener.